Talk:2006 Daytona 500/GA1

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 02:38, 29 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Here are my comments:

Lead

He maintained the lead from Newman and Mears ===>>> He maintained the lead over Newman and Mears
32 lead changes by 18 different drivers ===>>> 32 lead changes by a record-breaking 18 different drivers
Because this was the first race of the season ===>>> As this was the first race of the season
4.02336 km <<<=== Do you need that much precision?
Add something about the controversy with Knaus in relation to Johnson's win
Add that Johnson went on to win his first championship at the end of the season.

Background

The 2006 Daytona 500 ===>>> The Daytona 500 (You don't need to repeat the year twice in this sentence.)
stopped at 12:00 – 1:00 p.m. EST ===>>> stopped for one hour from 12:00 – 1:00 p.m. EST
and a speed of 187.219 mph (301.300 km/h) by Bill Elliott paced the second session. ===>>> , while Bill Elliott paced the second session with a speed of 187.219 mph (301.300 km/h). (for parallelism)
led sessions five and sixth ===>>> led sessions five and six
series officials and multiple digital cameras would observe drivers ===>>> series officials and multiple digital cameras would check for drivers
no longer be tolerated, " ===>>> no longer be tolerated. He commented, "

Practice and qualifier

The next two on February 15 were shortened to 60 minutes each. ===>>> The next two took place on February 15 after the first qualifier and were shortened to 60 minutes each.
58 cars entered the qualifier on February 12;[25] due to NASCAR's qualifying procedure only 43 could race ===>>> There were 58 cars entered the qualifier on February 12 for 43 spots in the race.
Each driver ran two laps, ===>>> According to NASCAR's qualifying procedure, each driver ran two laps.
and unlike most races during the season, the qualifying session determined the first two positions, while the rest of the drivers qualified by the 2006 Gatorade Duels. ===>>> Unlike most races during the season, the qualifying session only determined the first two positions – the pole and outside pole; the rest of the drivers needed to qualify in the 2006 Gatorade Duels, through which 37 positions were allocated [in order of ???]. [Explain the three speed qualifiers and the Champion's Provisional here.]
Mike Wallace's had a tire detach ===>>> Mike Wallace had a tire detach
Sadler and Gordon were the winners of the Gatorade Duels. ===>>> Sadler and Jeff Gordon were the winners of the Gatorade Duels.
The qualifying grid was finalized with Sadler, Kyle Busch, Carl Edwards, McMurray, Earnhardt, Bobby Labonte, Johnson and Mark Martin completing the top ten starters. <<<=== After this sentence, state the three speed qualifiers

Race

During the pace laps, Labonte and Nemechek <<<=== Which Labonte?
By lap three, two distinct packs of cars were established, with 27 vehicles in the lead pack, and the second was five seconds behind. ===>>> By lap three, two distinct packs of cars were established; 27 vehicles were in the lead pack, and the rest were five seconds behind.
lap-21 restart ===>>> lap 21 restart
Gordon became the new leader on the 24th lap <<<=== Which Gordon?
dropped offf his team's jack <<<=== too many 'f's
both sliding into the infield grass ===>>> both slid into the infield grass
but Mears remained with Johnson rather than draft Newman ===>>> but Mears remained with Johnson instead of drafting Newman
his at a restrictor plate track ===>>> his first at a restrictor plate track

Post-race

With regards to the uncertainty whether Johnson ===>>> With regards to the uncertainty over whether Johnson
he would be defend against personal criticism ===>>> he would defend against personal criticism
Because this was the first race of the season ===>>> As this was the first race of the season
Add that this victory set the stage for (or helped set up) Jimmie Johnson to win his first NASCAR championship at the end of the season.

Results

Okay.

Overall

All the links work!
No dab links.
No plagiarism concerns.
Everything looks sourced.

Overall, looks very solid. My main points are: Some of the qualifying details could be explained a bit better. I would suggest adding the Knaus controversy and Johnson's eventual championship to the lead to better highlight what the race received attention for, and the importance of the race in the context of the season. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:28, 29 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Sportsfan77777: All of the points raised above have been addressed to the best of my ability. Are there any other outstanding issues that need to be actioned? MWright96 (talk) 12:26, 29 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96: I made a few more tweaks. Other than that, I tried to find how the starting order was set outside the top 20 (for instance, why does Blaney start ahead of Vickers if he finished 23rd in Duel 2 while Vickers finished 20th in Duel 1?), but I couldn't find anything in the source. If you can explain that part of the starting order, I would suggest adding that too. But I'll pass the article, since I don't know if that's available. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:06, 30 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]