Talk:2006 Bass Pro Shops MBNA 500/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SSSB (talk · contribs) 11:45, 1 July 2019 (UTC)

This is my first review so I'm going to take my time to make sure I do it right, should be fun though.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

Lead

• There were nine cautions and 24 lead changes by seven drivers., should this be in the lead? I feel like an unnecessary amount of detail for the lead, especially the number of cautions. SSSB (talk) 12:39, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • It is the standard to see this kind of information in the lead of NASCAR race report articles. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

Background

• It was held on October 29, 2006 at Atlanta Motor Speedway in Hampton, Georgia, missing the between at and Atlanta. SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • This is the standard writing and speaking in the American English dialect. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• one of ten intermediate tracks to hold NASCAR-sanctioned races; the others are Charlotte Motor Speedway, Chicagoland Speedway, Darlington Raceway, Homestead Miami Speedway, Kansas Speedway, Kentucky Speedway, Las Vegas Motor Speedway, New Hampshire Motor Speedway, and Texas Motor Speedway. Listing the others feels like overkill, perhaps include it in a note? SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  •  Done MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• Going into the race, Matt Kenseth led the Drivers' Championship with 5,848 points, with his nearest rival Kevin Harvick was thirty-six points behind in second, and Jimmie Johnson was a further five points adrift in third. commas after race and second are out of place as is the word with. SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Have reworded this sentence slightly. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• Chevrolet (with 246 points) were already confirmed as champions six races beforehand. does this refer to Chevrolet having been confirmed champions 6 races before this one or 6 races before the end of the season? It's not clear. SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Clarified. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

Practice and qualifying

• I'm slightly confused as to when Qualifying was meant to be. I assume its on the Friday but its not clear. SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Have clarified to say qualifying was scheduled for the Friday afternoon. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• Thus, the starting order for the race was determined by where the drivers were placed in the Owners Championship. What are Owners points, are these the Manufacturers' Championship? SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • No it is not. The points in the Owners' Championship are awarded to each individual car entered and every team's car is counted as a separate entry. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• The four drivers who failed to qualify were Derrike Cope, Kirk Shelmerdine, Mike Skinner and Allmendinger. Did they fail to qualify because they were too slow (similair to 107% rule) or because the number of drivers who could start the race was limited? SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Clarified. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• In the first practice session, Edwards paced the field with a lap of 29.516 seconds. What does paced mean? SSSB (talk) 14:32, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Have reworded to say Edwards was fastest with a lap of 29.516 seconds MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

Race

• led Gordon by 7.871 seconds, but this was reduced to 2.605 seconds I feel this is too acurate, I think it would read better as 7.8 seconds and 2.6 seconds. SSSB (talk) 11:12, 2 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Not done. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• lapped car of Nemechek who got loose define got loose, if you choose replace the word loose remeber to do so with other uses of it in this section. SSSB (talk) 11:12, 2 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Loose is NASCAR-speak for oversteer. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• ...Gordon for the lead. Stewart subsequently pulled away from Gordon. This would read better as one sentence. SSSB (talk) 11:12, 2 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Reworded. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• Stewart (who had four tires fitted on his pit stop) doesn't this happen at all pitstops? SSSB (talk) 11:12, 2 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Not necessarily but I've removed that statement. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

Post race

• the driver was fined $15,000, penalized 50 points in the Owners and Drivers' Championship, and was put on probation until December 31, 2006. His crew chief Greg Erwin was fined $10,000, and put on probation until the end of the year. the way this is written makes it sound like they were on probation for a different amount of time. Perhaps the driver was fined $15,000, penalized 50 points in the Owners and Drivers' Championship. Both Gordan and his crew chief Greg Erwin were put on probation until the end of the year with Erwin also receiving a $10,000 fine would be better? SSSB (talk) 11:12, 2 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Reworded. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)
• Chevrolet increased their unassailable lead with 255 points. shouldn't with be changed to by? SSSB (talk) 11:12, 2 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Reworded the sentence so it reads as Chevrolet led with 255 points. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

Conclusion

There are several grammar errors and slighlty confusing statements that need to be sorted out but nothing major, I am therefore placing this review on hold so that the problems can be fixed. I also made a few suggestions which I think would improve the article but arent necessary changes to pass. ​ SSSB (talk) 11:33, 2 July 2019 (UTC)

• @SSSB: Many thanks for your comments above. I have addressed them where possible and have replied where necessary. MWright96 (talk) 16:57, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

  • @MWright96 and Kpgjhpjm:, I made a grammatical correction with this edit. I am happy to pass this article congrats. SSSB (talk) 09:13, 4 July 2019 (UTC)