Talk:2000 British Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: EnthusiastWorld37 (talk · contribs) 07:25, 3 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Mertbiol (talk · contribs) 13:12, 20 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will take on this review. I have some queries about some of the prose and a few of the sources, but generally the article is in good shape. Mertbiol (talk) 13:12, 20 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead section

First paragraph, first sentence: The formal name (LIII Foster's British Grand Prix) is not mentioned in the main body of the article.
First paragraph, first sentence: Since the number of spectators is so imprecise, I suggest deleting "before between 60,000 and 140,000 spectators".
Second paragraph, fourth sentence: Should "hydraulic issue" be "hydraulics issue" and can you link to hydraulics?
Second paragraph, final sentence: This is a long sentence (50 words). I suggest deleting "Michael Schumacher and later Jordan's Heinz-Harald Frentzen led the next five laps before" and starting the sentence with "Five laps later, Coulthard retook the lead..."

Background

Second paragraph, final sentence: Please move the comma before "respectively" to after it.
Third paragraph, first sentence: Reference [7] (Formula One Update – 14 April 2000) does not mention the San Marino Grand Prix.
Third paragraph, first sentence: Reference [7] (Formula One Update – 14 April 2000) does not give the dates for the testing period. I suggest you add reference [8] (Atlas F1 news service), which does mention the start of testing on 11 April and [1] which gives 14 April as the final day of testing.
Third paragraph, second sentence: Please rephrase to: "There was occasional rain during the period, making the track slippery."
Third paragraph, second sentence: Reference [7] (Formula One Update – 14 April 2000) does not say that the track was slippery. I suggest you also add reference [8] (Atlas F1 news service), which mentions intermittent rain.
Third paragraph, seventh sentence: Reference [12] (BAR explain Zonta Crash) is redirecting to the motorport homepage, so please remove |url-status= live.

Not done

Third paragraph, eighth sentence: Reference [13] (Autosport) is dated 13 April 2000 and refers to the penultimate day of testing. I suggest you add [2] which gives 14 April as the final day of testing.
Third paragraph, final sentence: It is not clear what relevance Luca Badoer's work at Fiorano and Vairano has to the British Grand Prix.

Not done If there is no direct relevance, I suggest deleting these sentences

Fifth paragraph, third sentence: Reference [24] (The Independent) does not appear to mention the Belgian tobacco advertising laws.
Fifth paragraph, final sentence: Reference [28] (Bernie don't blame me for the weather) is redirecting to the motorport homepage, so please remove |url-status= live.
Sixth paragraph, fourth sentence: Should "lower the risk of drivers entering and leaving the pit lane" be "lower the risk of drivers being distracted while entering and leaving the pit lane" per reference [30] (Alan Baldwin)?
Final paragraph, first sentence: Reference [31] (Bigger tyre-walls) is redirecting to the motorport homepage, so please remove |url-status= live.
Final paragraph, second sentence: Please change "to try and stop cars from going airborne" to "to prevent cars becoming airborne."

Practice

Second paragraph, final sentence: Reference [45] (Frentzen fastest) says ""The stewards decided to cut the session short rather than extend it to the full one hour" which has a different meaning to "The stewards decided to end the session one hour earlier than planned".
Third paragraph, final sentence: I am not sure of the relevance of Ron Dennis not criticizing Silverstone for the weather. I suggest deleting the second half of this sentence.
Fourth paragraph, fourth sentence: Should "Club Corner" have a small "c" for "Corner"?

Not done

Final paragraph, final sentence: I suggest changing "causing flames to emerge from the Prost car's rear on the way to pit lane after 25 minutes" to "causing flames to emerge from the rear of his car on the way to the pit lane after 25 minutes of the session."

Qualifying

First paragraph, final sentence: Please clarify what is meant by "to avoid being hampered" - presumably this would be by slower cars already on the circuit. Can you provide more detail on the "driver error" did Ralf Schumacher make?

Race

First paragraph: Please start this paragraph by giving the date of the race and the number of laps. It might be sensible to restate the formal name of the race (LIII Foster's British Grand Prix) here.
First paragraph, sixth sentence: Please delete "had" from "This forced Michael Schumacher had to slow".
First paragraph, eighth sentence: Should "Maggots Corner" have a small "c" for "Corner"?

Post-race

First paragraph, third sentence: Reference [98] (Coulthard – the best is yet to come) is redirecting to the motorport homepage, so please remove |url-status= live.

Sources

In addition to the sources discussed above, I have checked and found no problems with: [9], [10], [11], [14], [15], [16], [17], [18], [19], [20], [21], [22], [23], [24], [26], [27], [29], [30], [32], [33], [35], [38], [46], [47], [48], [49], [51], [52], [68], [69], [71], [77], [99], [100].

Stopping here for now

That's all for the first pass through the article. Over to you @EnthusiastWorld37: Best wishes, Mertbiol (talk) 13:12, 20 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Mertbiol: Changes to the article have been made based on the above issues. What else will need to be addressed? EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 18:34, 20 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@EnthusiastWorld37: A few points not addressed, which I have marked with Not done. I will read the article through again and will give you any further feedback tomorrow evening. Mertbiol (talk) 18:57, 20 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]