Talk:1st Army (Kingdom of Yugoslavia)/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 16:21, 16 August 2014 (UTC)
- No problems with DABs or external links.
- Images are properly licensed, but are lacking. Can you add one or two pictures of Yugoslav troops? Preferably, but not necessarily, of men from units of this army.
- If only. There are very few free pics of the Yugoslav Army, let alone this particular Army.
- The lede is a bit over detailed for my taste as you've got a lot of specifics in the 2nd para. I'd drop most of the dates and just say that they were outflanked and forced to withdraw, etc.
- Have trimmed it a bit.
- Got some overlinks that require clean up.
- Fixed.
- Add links for the generals' ranks. I'm not sure how they compare to Western ranks. Oh, I see they're notes. Probably better as straight links, IMO.
- There are issues with the ranks which regularly come up, especially regarding the general's ranks. I've left them in their original form so it is clear what rank they were, with the US Army equivalent in a note (as this is also often an issue). There aren't articles for the specific Yugoslav ranks, and linking them to the US ones would be a bit WP:EASTEREGGish IMO.
- While pneumatic boats might be technically correct, "rubber boats" is how it's generally given in the books that I've read.
- pneumatic is what the source uses, and it is a US Army source.
- Any chance of a more detailed map covering the areas moved/fought through?
- Working on that, not ready as yet.
- It's not really clear that the bulk of the 1st Army was never seriously engaged by either the Germans or the Hungarians, but were encircled by the Germans.
- They weren't so much encircled as carved up.
- Looks pretty good aside from: about 20 32 kilometres. Any ETA on the map, or should I not wait on it?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:07, 21 August 2014 (UTC)
- convert fix done. I'm prepping a series of maps for the whole Yugoslav ORBAT, so it will go in prior to an ACR nom, not now. Thanks for the review! Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 03:17, 21 August 2014 (UTC)