Talk:1998 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 18:49, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this.

Remove the link to Alex's article in the lede. Don't wanna tempt trolls :P
"and the season's final storm, Hurricane Nicole, dissipated on December 1." - not quite true. Nicole became extratropical on the 1st, but didn't dissipate til the following day.
"The most intense hurricane, Mitch, is tied with Hurricane Dean for the seventh most intense Atlantic hurricane ever recorded as well as the second deadliest Atlantic hurricane in recorded history." - this sounds like Dean is tied twice, and note the redundancy. Also, is or was?
"Additionally, the system dropped tremendous amounts of rainfall in Guatemala, becoming the wettest tropical cyclone at that location on record." - unusual thing to mention, considering impact was worst in Honduras.
" Hurricane Bonnie made landfall in southeastern North Carolina as a Category 2 hurricane in late August killing five people and causing about $1 billion (1998 USD) in damage." - a comma would be helpful after "August"
In the note describing "1998 USD", you should write out "1998 United States dollars".
"Hurricane Earl made landfall in Florida as a Category 1 hurricane causing $79 million in damage and killing three people." - that's almost the same sentence as Bonnie. Make it more interesting (and don't forget to add a comma).
"Hurricane Georges was an intense Category 4 hurricane that moved through many of the Caribbean Islands causing significant damage before making landfall near Biloxi, Mississippi at Category 3 intensity. " - do you not like commas?!
"behind only the "Great Hurricane"." - year would be helpful
"Three hurricanes and three tropical storms made landfall during the seasons" - is "seasons" intentional?
"However, both storms became a hurricane, which the second cyclone, Hurricane Mitch, become the most intense, deadliest, and costliest storm of the 1998 Atlantic hurricane season." - something is missing. I think put "of" before "which"
"The last tropical cyclone, Hurricane Nicole, formed on November 24 and dissipated on December 1 – one day after the end of the official season boundaries." - this is nearly the same as the final sentence of the previous paragraph.
"Subtropical cyclones are excluded from the total" - why is this mentioned if there were no subtropical storms in 1998?
What made 1998 so active?
Link UTC
"Initially, minimal change in structure or convection occurred on July 27 and most of July 28." - you have two mentions of dates here, not that necessary.
"The storm rapidly weakened inland and briefly to a tropical storm later on August 27' - weird wording
"Erosion was also severe, with numerous docks, piers, and bulkheads were either damage or destroyed" - when you have "with" as a descriptive phrase, you don't need the "were"
"while about 750,000 people losing electricity" - grammar
"Approximately, damage in Virginia reached $95 million." - what's with "approximately"?
I'd rather see Canadian impact from Bonnie then seeing how there were downed trees and power lines in three states (hint, merge those bits together).
"while located about 315 miles (507 km) east of the south Texas coast" - how can you have such an exact measurement for such a vague area?
"where about 2000 houses, mobile homes, and apartments combined were destroyed" - combined isn't the right term here. I'd say "where collectively about 2000..."
I'd split Danielle's section by MH and impact, even though the paragraphs will be uneven.
"rainfall fell during its transit" - bad redundancy, and don't start a paragraph with "its"
Could you cut down on the county impact in Earl? It's not terribly interesting or epic.
OK, I'm just noticing it now, but you really gotta change up the variety of how you start each section. 10 of them start with "a tropical wave", four of which are "a tropical wave developed", which is pretty unacceptable.
You should go more into Frances' impact in Mexico, beyond just deaths and the rivers.
"Rainfall was the storm in the United States peaked at " - wha?
"Tides Cameron Parish in were" - hm?
"there was about $500 million in damage and two fatalities, both in Louisiana' - sounds like the $500 million was also in Louisiana.
"A tropical wave emerged into on September 13' - missing something?
" By September 20, Georges peaked as a 155 mph (250 km/h) Category 4 hurricane. " - that's a big jump from Georges becoming a tropical storm! Add at least one sentence about what conditions allowed for such intensification.
" However, it weakened thereafter" - why?
Watch for tense consistency. I fixed two instances of "were damage"
"wiped out more two-thirds of crops" - add a "than" after "more"?
"Six deaths and $305.8 million in damage was reported in Cuba" - was or were reported?
"one fatality was reported in Mobile when a woman was driving and slid off the road into a creek and drowned" - bit of a run-on
"One of the worst impacted areas was Stone County, where 54 homes had minor damage, 26 suffered major damage and 5 were destroyed. " - that doesn't sound that epic. What was the form of all of the damage in Mississippi?
"while strong winds and storm surge combined impacted" - eh?
"A tropical wave crossed the Africa coast near Dakar, Senegal and entered the Atlantic Ocean on September 5" - why so specific?
"The outerbands" - is that a word?
"At Lake Catouatchie, a man went to untangle debris in his boat propeller and attempted to swim after the boat.[23] However, he went missing and his body was found two days later." - bit trivial. Could you combine these sentences?
"Though by September 20, an elongated trough turned the depression northwest." - that's not a sentence
"While heading north-northwestward on September 23, the storm briefly weakened, just quickly re-strengthened and became a hurricane later that day." - unclear what happened.
Any reason you don't mention Ivan's extratropical history?
Any reason Karl hasn't been merged?
I am utterly aghast that you don't mention one of the most important events of the season, when there were four simultaneous hurricanes. There is an image of it from a previous version of the article!
"Though by October 3" - don't start a sentence this way
"It is estimated that Tropical Depression Twelve formed at 0000 UTC on October 5" - that is original research.
"It is estimated that Tropical Depression Twelve formed at 0000 UTC on October 5," - probably should add the word "reported" in there
"Mitch degenerated into a low pressure area on November 2 near the border of Mexico and Guatemala, although it was re-designated a tropical storm after emerging into the Bay of Campeche later that day." - that is false. Mitch wasn't re-designated until the 3rd
"about 25 villages were completely dismantled and 33,000 homes were destroyed and another 50,000 were damaged" - run-on
"Damage totaled to" - no need for "to"
"affects to agriculture" - when it's a noun, it should be "effect"
"almost 24,000 houses were destroyed and an additional 17,600 were damaged" - this should not be preceded by a semicolon.
"Flash flooding and landslides in El Salvador damaged from than 10,000 homes" - eh?
"An intense frontal low that persisted near the Canary Islands, gradually acquired tropical characteristics and a low-level circulation." - why the comma?
"Thus, Tropical Depression Fourteen developed at 0000 UTC on November 24," - that is original research
I notice in the season effects, you assume the highest amount for various stats, such as the $1 billion for Bonnie. The potential errors in rounding makes the "13,729 million" incorrect. See significant figures. Since most of Mitch and Georges' totals are in the billions, you can't be so precise for the total. Also, could you convert to the new season effects table?

Given the many problems, I'm going to have to fail the article. It's pretty decent, but there are many issues, including some original research. Feel free to contact me if there are any issues, and I'll be happy to review again if you nominate in the future. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:49, 8 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]