Talk:1997 Bojnurd earthquake/GA1
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 11:53, 15 December 2022 (UTC)
- Due to substantial contributions by @Dora the Axe-plorer to this article, I am pinging him so that he is aware this review is taking place as well. SamBroGaming (talk) 01:39, 16 December 2022 (UTC)
Happy to review the article. Thanks for telling me the above SamBroGaming, please note you are the editor I will be working with during the review. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 08:46, 16 December 2022 (UTC)
Review comments
[edit]Lead section / infobox
[edit]Link Mw (Moment magnitude scale, in the lead and the infobox); faulting (Fault (geology)).Consider amending Kopet Dag mountains to ‘Kopet Dag mount range’ - Kopet Dag should be linked.~579 should be written in full.northeast of Tehran – the citations that follow this don’t seem necessary, as the information is not controversial.seismically active faults – can be simplified to 'active faults' (linked).Amend tectonic processes to ‘tectonics’ (linked).One-hundred and seventy-three – consider amending to '173' (see MOS:SPELL09, not GA)
1 Background and tectonics
[edit]Consider linking tectonic in the caption (using Tectonics).Link geological.The image’s caption should not have a full stop at the end, as it is a segment (see MOS:CAPFRAG). This issue reoccurs further on.Non-specialist readers might appreciate an indication of when the events mentioned in the first paragraphs occurred.- Link
deformation (Deformation (engineering)); thrust faulting;strike-slip faults (Fault_(geology)#Strike-slip_faults);Bojnurd. 23 mm (0.91 in)/yr - ‘23 mm (0.91 in) per year looks better imo.the closure of the Tethys Ocean. It closed when – consider combining the sentences to make this ‘the closure of the Tethys Ocean, which occurred when’.
2 Earthquake
[edit]- Link epicenter.
The motion map, whilst be interesting in its own right, causes sandwiching (MOS:SANDWICH) and doesn’t relate directly with the text of the section. The image is quite difficult to read and lacks interpretation, and I would omit it, and provide a clear guide for the link in External links.- The first paragraph appears not to be about the 1997 earthquake, and so doesn’t belong here. I would put the text in the section above.
It is believed to have produced up to 35 km (22 mi) of strike-slip displacement. - is this sentence referring to the 1997 earthquake? If so, the text needs to make this clear.The second paragraph is hard to understand, because the chronology is confused, and the text is a mixture of historical facts and geology. Some copy editing needed here.many years later – needs amending (see MOS:RELTIME).
3 Impact
[edit]106 in Bojnurd and 67 in Shirvan - ‘106 in Bojnurd county and 67 in Shirvan county’?Link adobe; foreshock.
4 Aftermath
[edit]relief works. Relief workers – consider amending the text to avoid these phrases being repeated so close together.
6 Notes
[edit]External links should be avoided in the main text. Please cite the note correctly (see WP:ELPOINTS).
7 References
[edit]Any chance that the Persian title of Ref 15 (Heidarzadeh) can be translated into English?
On hold
[edit]I'm putting the article on hold for 2 weeks (you might be busy!) until 4 January to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 20:27, 20 December 2022 (UTC)
- @Amitchell125: Hello, I have fixed most of the issues in the article. However, I didn't change the 173 because you can't start a sentence with a number. I believe that that is all. SamBroGaming (talk) 07:53, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
- @SamBroGaming: Thanks, I'll cross out any issues that are sorted, and put a small cross ( ) to indicate where I think something still needs to be addressed. Amitchell125 (talk) 09:03, 28 December 2022 (UTC)
Passing
[edit]There's a few links still not sorted, but I'll leave them for you to decide about. Passing now, well done. Amitchell125 (talk) 11:38, 28 December 2022 (UTC)