Talk:1993–94 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article for the following reasons:

We are close to our 3rd SWIO GT. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I just GAN'd Octave so I should review a GA. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The 1993–94 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season was the most active on record with 15 named storms, including one named tropical depression." List of historic tropical cyclone names the 1964-65 got to 16 storms. (Okay, after reading the SS just say in the satellite era. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed, thanks. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:35, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Mention cyclone year in the lead. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Why/where/what? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:35, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"With gusts as strong as 350 km/h (220 mph) accompanied by heavy rainfall, the cyclone wrecked areas along its path, destroying more than 40,000 homes and leaving 356,000 people homeless." no need for the second part, it is obvious is wrecked areas on it's path when you said it was "destroying more than 40,000 homes and leaving 356,000 people homeless". YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Agreed, more powerful. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:35, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Cyclone Nadia was the second deadliest cyclone, having killed 12 people in northern Madagascar and later severely damaging portions of northeastern Mozambique, killing about 240 people and leaving $20 million in damage." to make it a clear that that is just Mozambique impact, change it to "Cyclone Nadia was the second deadliest cyclone, having killed 12 people in northern Madagascar and later severely damaging portions of northeastern Mozambique, where 240 people perished and it left $20 million in damage." YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I tweaked to add "in the latter country". --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:35, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"as well as by the Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC)[nb 3]" Ever heard of a period? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Well....................... --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:35, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"In the year, MFR tracked tropical cyclones south of the equator from the coast of Africa to 90º E.[3]" link to the 90th meridian east. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- K. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:35, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Mention the MSM (Mauritius weather service) and the JTWC in the SS. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Added MSM. JTWC is already mentioned elsewhere. Since they're not official, I didn't feel the need to mention them there. That work? ~~<~
You see should note if the number of STC/VITC's where and how they compared to average. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I can't find average. I know VITC's are very rare though. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
You are missing a see also section, BTW. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Added. Hurricanehink mobile (talk) 17:38, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will finish such review later, I have to eat my lunch, and then go out. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:28, 13 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"It formed in tandem with two tropical depressions in the North Indian ocean.[11]" tandem? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Meaning at the same time. Hurricanehink mobile (talk) 17:38, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"On November 10, the depression intensified into Moderate Tropical Storm Alexina," what scale? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- It isn't a scale, just a terminology for the basin. Should I link, or something? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"which the JTWC assessed as having formed in the western Australian basin.[13]" link to tropical cyclone basins. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I linked earlier to the Aus season. Not sure if the link to basins is most appropriate. Hurricanehink mobile (talk) 17:38, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I'd leave a note about how the JTWC and MFR use 10 and 1 minute sustained winds instead of mentioning it 100 times. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Added. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The intertropical convergence zone spawned a tropical disturbance in the northeast portion of the basin on December 9. " Link to ITCZ. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Added. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"On January 11, a tropical low formed northwest of Broome, Western Australia. It was named Pearl a few hours later by the Bureau of Meteorology.[18] " which TCWC? Perth? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I think that's kinda unnecessary. I tried keeping the history out of the basin to a minimal. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"As the system moved west of 90°E, " you were suppose to have linked to 90E above :P (That's the weakness from doing articles backwards, it is hard to manage wikilinks.) YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Oops, heh. Delinked. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"High wind shear caused rapid weakening, and by January 19, there was little remaining convection.[4] " no need to source ref 4 here since you did it in the same block of text without any intervening references. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks, glad to cut down on that a bit. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Cyclone Geralda, the strongest of the season and the strongest to hit Madagascar since a cyclone in March 1927.[4][16] " why is this the first sentence. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Moved. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Nationwide, the cyclone killed 231 people and caused over $10 million in damage (1994 USD).[4]" nice sentence, but no need for year, you mention the year in a note at the start of an article. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Ack. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" Few stocks were pre-positioned, causing food prices to rise greatly. Several countries and departments of the United Nations donated money or supplies to the country.[16][20][4]" order the refs numerically. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Kinda picky, but OK. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The monsoon trough remained active, spawning a tropical depression on February 6 south of the Chagos Archipelago. " you linked that earlier FYI. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Oops. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" and that day Hollanda struck the island of Mauritius at that intensity. " same here :P YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- :( --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"$135 million in damage on Mauritius.[25][23] " order the refs numerically. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Again, picky, but OK. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The highest rainfall from the cyclone fell on Réunion, with 741 mm (29.2 in) recorded at Grand Coude." link is red by the way. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
- I know. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
See Hollanda's article for Ivy impact. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Wha? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"despite that the system did not intensify into a moderate tropical storm, the Meteorological Service of Madagascar named the depression Julita on February 17. " it's Mauritius not Madagascar, BTW. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- The ref said Madagascar. Both Madagascar and Mauritius can name storms. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Watch for overlinking in Litanne section. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Yea, that's what I get for doing Litanne first. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"On March 10, the MFR estimated the system became a tropical depression once it developed a central dense overcast,[4] " you link the above, BTW. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Blargh. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) estimated 1 minute winds of about 220 km/h (140 mph).[32] "

you've covered what the JTWC is already! Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

- Blargh! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" although it reintensified slightly before making landfall in northeastern Mozambique on March 24." you've linked landfall like 3 times already :P 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)
- Yea, fixed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" estimated at about $20 million (1994 USD).[34]" um, you've left a note what 1994 USD is. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Yep. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Effects spread as far inland as Malawi.[36]" be specific. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Can't. The source wasn't. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" Odille developed a well-defined eye 45 km (28 mi) in diameter, and MFR estimated peak winds of 175 km/h (109 mph),[4]" wanna round? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Stupid template. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Same overlinking thing applies to Odile, LPA, shear, eye feature, and Rodrigues, were all linked above. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:10, 15 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
On ref #1, links to NHC. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Now, address these, so we can get our 3rd SWIO GT. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:53, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]