Talk:1977 Bob–Tangol earthquake

1977 Bob–Tangol earthquake has been listed as one of the Natural sciences good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: September 10, 2022. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Dawnseeker2000 (talk · contribs) 17:55, 7 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Hello again. In the strong ground motion section, should the text "small-amplitude shaking" be changed to "low-amplitude shaking" or did you write it that way to avoid close paraphrasing? Dawnseeker2000 18:19, 7 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Oh I see now. That's what the source says. I'll change it to "low amplitude" as that's what most native English speakers would say. Dawnseeker2000 22:30, 7 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The aftermath section is reasonably well written, but I find reading it doesn't have great flow because of the use of short sentences. It won't influence pass or fail, and it can be improved over time, but just something that I noticed. Dawnseeker2000 18:42, 7 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I have rearranged the sentences so it flows better when reading. The short sentences are still there but the flow should be slightly improved. Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 00:04, 8 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It's alright. It's not necessary for a pass, so no need to fix anything. Sometimes better wording just comes to you randomly as opposed to brainstorming about it. Dawnseeker2000 00:22, 8 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Could we please do a copy edit with a focus on locating any close paraphrasing and if any instances are found, rewriting to distance our text from the source text? Dawnseeker2000 12:14, 9 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Will work on this. Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 12:31, 9 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I have gone through the sources and fixed these close paraphrasing to the best that I can. Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 14:43, 9 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I have a question about the discussion of deaths in the article. In the three-paragraph aftermath section, deaths are mentioned in each of them. Then again, in the response, the topic is raised again. Is there something specific in that final section about why the death toll was mentioned again? It seems like it is just the confusion of the body count in the chaos. Is that it? Dawnseeker2000 16:47, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I mentioned the NYT earlier reported figures since it would come handy in the next sentence; anticipation for the count to rise and continued recovery efforts. Eventually the final toll rises to 584–665 per later sources. Perhaps if I dated the earlier claim (Dec 21, 77) and move the response section before aftermath, the article reads better. Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 17:18, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'd thought about this a few days ago: the aftermath section reads like a damage section and the response section could actually be an aftermath section. Anyway, the article probably aligns with the GA criteria now, but I didn't want to move ahead without mentioning that potential source of confusion with how the deaths are presented. Dawnseeker2000 17:38, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I may rename the headers to avoid confusion. Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 00:22, 11 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]