Talk:1973–74 Buffalo Braves season/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 14:01, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: fixed six dabs.[1] Jezhotwells (talk) 14:06, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Linkrot: one dead link found and tagged.[2] Jezhotwells (talk) 14:12, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
... for the expansion Buffalo Braves franchise ... Please explain what an expansion franchise is for those unfamiliar with basketball terminology.

... the team made a series of player transactions that were part of the resume that earned Buffalo Braves General Manager Eddie Donovan the NBA Executive of the Year Award ... "resumé" (note the accent) is not the right word here.

Donovan's season compounded his reputation as a wheeler and dealer. Compounded is not right either.

Prior to the 1973–74 NBA season ...; Prior to the start of the season the Braves... Two sentences starting with the same phrase. Clumsy.

The Braves drafted four players in the 1973 NBA Draft who played for the 1973–74 team: DiGregorio, Ken Charles, Mike Macaluso, and Jim Garvin Clumsy, rephrase for clarity.

The team reached five games over .500 several time Surely "times"?

Two weeks later on November 28, the Braves were victimized by Pete Maravich who entered the game in the second quarter and posted 42 points off the bench to lead the Atlanta Hawks over the Braves by 130–106. Victimized? This is really too full of jargon.

It was the last time in NBA history that one player averaged both 30 points and 15 rebounds in an NBA season. Last time? Has the NBA folded?

However, the Braves had won the most recent two matches after 22 straight defeats, including 5 earlier this season. Surely "that season"?

Weasel words such as "blew", "erupted"

Then when a McAdoo shot fell out of the rim, McMillian tipped the ball in as time expired for the victory. Clumsy, rephrase for clarity.

Overall, poorly written, jargon laden. Put yourself in the place of someone who knows less about basketball than you obviously do. Good encyclopaedia articles need to be written clearly in good plain English. Take a look at [[WP::WikiProject Military history/Academy/Copy-editing essentials#Language tips]]. Although written for the MilHist project the concepts there apply to all articles. See also Wikipedia:Use plain English. Reorganise the sections such as Transactions, Regular season, etc. so that each has a clear narrative flow, rather than being an almost random assembly of facts.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
One dead link as noted above.

Several references appear to have double titles, see #4 & #47 for example.

Those references that I could access appear mostly OK, but I note an over reliance on Basketball-Reference.com

ref #16 & #17 don't actually say that the players didn't play in the 73-74 season. They just don't mention that season.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Hard to say in the present state of the article. Would be good to see what the press reported about the season. Did the club make money, lose money? What was reported about fan reaction?
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
It should be explained that the Memorial stadium is the one nearest the camera.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
This needs a lot of work, especially on the pose, so I shall not be listing it at this time. Jezhotwells (talk) 15:07, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]