Talk:1949 Pacific hurricane season/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanefan25 (talk · contribs) 19:24, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"Six known tropical cyclones occurred during the season, the earliest formed on June 11 and the latest dissipated on September 30." - can you reword it to something like "Six tropical cyclones were known to have existed during the season, of which the first formed on June 11 and the final formed on September 30"?
- Added your suggestion. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"...which was nearly 100 years after records in the Atlantic Ocean began." Remove that, trivial and irrelevant to the season itself - previous stuff was fine
- Meh, removed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Ths season was also beginning" - I think you mean "This season was also the beginning"
- Yeah. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"...the Pacific Decadal Oscillation,[3]" - where's the rest of the text?
- Err, suppost to be a period. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"1949-2006" - use an en dash (–)
- Added. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"Most of the seven tropical cyclones did not differentiate in intensity during the duration[4]," - put the ref after the comma*"While remaining far west of the Mexican coast, Two peaked as a mid-level tropical storm." - any specific info? (like HURDAT winds or pressures?)
- No pressure, winds have been added.Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"After no tropical cyclone activity in July and August" - Why not "After inactivity in July and August"?
- Inactivity could suggest that TC's did form (i.e. the 1964 Pacific hurricane season was inactive), but my wording does not. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"By September 8, Tropical Storm Three" - should be "on", not "by", as "by" sort of implies that it ended or started an event
- Okay. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"The outer rainbands of this system was expected to bring squally weather" - should be "were", not "was"
- Good catch. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"The first hurricane of the season developed on September 9. Hurricane Four formed 160 mi (260 km) east-southeast of Socorro Island" - merge sentences if possible, with more content from the next sentence ("tied Hurricane Six...")
- Combined. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"the storm was discovered as a minimal tropical storm, and did not further intensify. Failing to intensify past a minimal tropical storm, the system" - you use "intensify" just a few words later
- - Removed redundancy. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"The storm began to intensify while inland over Guatemala" - don't use "inland" again; maybe "overland"?
- Why not inland? overland could suggest the tropical storm was near the moon. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Refs: Spell Los Angeles correctly
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Use consistent date formats
- They should be consistent, the HURDAT ones are not actionable since they are templates.Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:41, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]