Talk:1946 Cleveland Browns season/GA1
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Reviewer: Go Phightins! (talk · contribs) 03:30, 17 October 2012 (UTC) I'll take a look in the coming days, but will start tomorrow, as I am too tired right now.
- Thanks -- I'm here to answer any queries, as always. --Batard0 (talk) 08:51, 17 October 2012 (UTC)
Review
[edit]I'll just post some general thoughts as I go through.
Lead
[edit]Perhaps we could use a word other than "magnate"...I know what it means, but some might not. Entrepreneur, tycoon, I don't know.
- Changed to "tycoon". Thanks for the suggestion. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
The attendance figure seems a little out of place; though that could just be me.
- It does. Removed. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
Other pre-game summary sections
[edit]I think there may be a little too much on the founding of the AAFC rather than just the Cleveland Browns founding.
- Agreed. I shortened it considerably by removing a few sentences. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
What positions did the two reserves play?
- Added (tackle and guard). --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
The rest
[edit]Is there a reason that in the season table, some of the teams are linked and some aren't? Do the un-linked ones not have Wikipedia pages?
- All the teams have wikipedia pages. I linked them all. I think the reason some weren't linked was that they had appeared earlier in the table, but I think it does look slightly awkward to have some as links and some not. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
I'm not a big fan of the week four summary starting with the ticket prices, I feel like that should be at the end of the summary or in a separate section.
- Moved to the end. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
References
[edit]I know I've said this before, and I know it's hard, but honestly, some non-Piascik references would be nice. I understand they provide comprehensive coverage, but it just seems the more the merrier in terms of sources.
- I will try to find some more -- there are a limited number of sources I know about that cover the season in depth, but I'll see what I can do in the next day or so on this point. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
Final thoughts
[edit]Well, as usual, you've invested the time and effort into getting this up to almost GA status, and I'm inclined to accept pending the slight modifications suggested above. Keep up the good work!
- Thanks much for the review -- great suggestions and improvements, as always. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
I've listed
[edit]Congrats on another GA. Go Phightins! 20:11, 18 October 2012 (UTC)