Talk:1929 Bahamas hurricane/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 04:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

As a general note, there are mixed instances of "the Bahamas" and "The Bahamas" even accounting for their proper usages. Double check those.
The note for monetary values in 1929 USD comes after the second damage total listed in the lede.
"becoming a tropical depression approximately 355 mi (571 km) northeast" - Approximately and exact are too different things. 571 km is exact.
"Fresh Creek and Staniard Creek saw extensive damage from the hurricane." - I'm confused, how are rivers damaged?
- They are creeks, but I'm fairly certain they were also districts in the Bahamas in 1929. The related sources make it pretty clear that they are communities that suffered during the storm. TheAustinMan^{(Talk ⬩ Edits)} 23:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Nassau was also inundated by the storm surge and heavy rainfall, submerging parts of the city's southern district under over 4 ft (1.2 m) of water for several days." - Not a big deal, but I don't like the placement of under over lol.
"Water reached the second floor of a hotel, allowing a boat to float there." - I don't think it was a matter of "allowing." The boat didn't need permission.
"The hurricane wreaked havoc on Nassau Harbour, where many shipowners chose to remain on their ships, which were blown away and never recovered." - What happened to the shipowners?
- Their fate is not covered in the sources. TheAustinMan^{(Talk ⬩ Edits)} 23:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"...while other boats were blown out to sea." - We just established that.
"With their homes lost, many of the 300 people who sheltered at a church in Grant's Town on New Providence Issland remained there for several weeks." - Eextra letter.
"New building codes were enacted to better withstand the effects of hurricanes. Compliance with these codes was intended to secure buildings against winds of 75–185 mph (120–300 km/h)" - Unnecessarily large range. Can't we just say winds up to 185 mph?
"A partial evacuation of the Everglades was conducted on September 25; several hundred sought refuge in West Palm Beach while others fled to Arcadia and Sebring." - Several hundred what?
"while a figure of $1 million published in the Bulletin of the American Meteorological Society." - Missing a word.
"The slow forward motion contributed to torrential rainfall over South Florida, producing a 10.63 in (270 mm) rainfall total in Miami on September 28." --> The storm's slow forward motion contributed to torrential rainfall over South Florida, peaking at 10.63 in (270 mm) in Miami on September 28."?
"Gusts of 100 mph (160 km/h) accompanied the hurricane's landfall on the Florida panhand;e" - Random semicolon.
"In Alabama, the damage was generally minor but most pronounced in crops" - "in crops" to "to crops"?
"with many pecans were blown from trees" - Grammar.
"A conservative estimate from the Weather Bureau appraised damage to agriculture, highways, and at $3 million" - Missing a word.
"$160,000 in property dmage was estimated to have been mitigated by timely flood warnings." - Spelling.
"Total losses in South Carolina from flooding associated with the storm reached $3.829 million" - Do we need that level of precision?
- Don't see why not. As long as numbers are not being added in giving false precision, the number is as reported. TheAustinMan^{(Talk ⬩ Edits)} 23:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"October 1929 was ultimately North Carolina's rainiest October on record." - At the time...

Great work otherwise. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 04:34, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Appreciate the review. I've patched up most of these qualms, but have responded where I disagreed with suggested changes. —TheAustinMan^{(Talk ⬩ Edits)} 23:05, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]