Talk:1929–30 Cardiff City F.C. season/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:35, 11 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"The 1929–30 season was the 29th season of competitive football played by Cardiff City F.C. and the team's first season in the Second Division of the Football League since being relegated from the First Division the previous year." - repetition of season
Wikilink relegation to Promotion and relegation
"Ralph Williams was the club's highest scorer in the league, scoring 11 times despite only joining the club midway through the season." - repetition of club

Wikilink relegated to Promotion and relegation on the first mention only
Wikilink First Division to the appropriate article on the first mention
"manager Fred Stewart was provided with a small fund to sign new players." - how much was the fund? Do we know?
"Frank Moss and Tommy Hampson were also allowed to leave." - what happened to Hampson and Moss?

"in their next three fixtures Cardiff scored only once, during a 1–0 victory over Barnsley on 19 October." - who was the sole goalscorer in this period?
"the club received an offer for his services from Manchester United and, with falling attendances continuing to drain the club's finances, eventually accepted." - repetition of "club"
"before finishing December by beating Charlton 1–0 to end the year in fifth place." - how about to end 1929 instead?

"news reached the club of the sudden death of Ferguson, the club's top goalscorer for the past three seasons" - repetition of "club"
"Both Williams and George Blackburn scored their first goals for the club during the game during the tie." - think the phrase in bold can be deleted
"they lost 3 of their next four games and failed to score in each defeat." - three

"The side were able to upset their higher ranked opponents as Len Davies scored twice to give Cardiff a 2–1 victory." - upset could be wikilinked to Upset (competition)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 19:54, 11 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: All points addressed, the only one I couldn't action was the transfer fund as the source doesn't say how much. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 13:13, 12 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]