Talk:1923–24 Cardiff City F.C. season/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:20, 5 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Round vs round in the infobox. - Fixed
"The Football League", our article calls it "the Football League". This may impact a few instances. - Fixed
"Cardiff enjoyed..." not particularly encyclopedic in tone. - Fixed
" the previous year " it was a season, and you could pipelink it. - Linked
" dropped them to" vs "draw its final", reads odd to my ears to have them inconsistent plural/singular. See subsequent prose too... - Reworded
" Birmingham allowing" -> " Birmingham City allowing"

I don't think Birmingham added the City to their name until later on. Kosack (talk) 14:16, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

" Len Davies finished the season as the club's top goalscorer for the fourth consecutive season..." season ... season. Probably don't need "the season". - Reworded
"1921–22 season.[2] Expectations ahead " loathe as I am to advocate jumbo sentences, I think this would benefit from being a single sentence with "and" there because of the natural linkage of both sentences right now. - Done
"from Wallsend" if it were me, I'd expand that to the full club title. - Done
No need to relink Newcastle United, that was already linked in the preseason section. - Done
"being described as " by whom? - Added
"St. Mirren " piped to a redirect, no full stop required either way. - Fixed
"meant that the team " -> "meant that Cardiff" - Done
" for over two months" more than. - Done
"of over 50,000" more than. - Done
"The side's disastrous run" a little hyperbolic, perhaps, for an encyclopedia? - Reworded
" first time the championship had ever been decided by the method of goal average" just out of curiosity, did it happen subsequently?
- It seems it happened a few times in the 1950s also [1] Kosack (talk) 18:53, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
This section is a lot of prose, any chance of a couple of images to break it up a little?
- Added an image of Gill. Only Keenor has an image out of the rest of the players who featured that year so I don't have anymore to add unfortunately. Kosack (talk) 18:53, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It would be great if we could apply some of MOS:ACCESS to the tables, e.g. row/col scopes? - Added
Could also make them sortable, at least the date, result, opposition and attendance columns? Especially as you've relinked every team every time... - Added
Link "own goal" in the prose. - Done
"Cardiff began their FA Cup campaign agains..." probably worth noting they started in the first round, as these days, ain't so obvious... - Done
"Despite the man handicap" odd way of putting it, perhaps, "Despite being down to ten players"? - Done
"24 players featured..." don't start a sentence with a number. - Done
Any reason you're not using a standard wikitable for the Player statistics? That table looks particularly odd when all the other tables in the article are of a standard format...
- When I started these season articles, I came across 1920–21 Burnley F.C. season which uses the same format and picked it up from there. Kosack (talk) 15:44, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
You could link 1925 FA Cup Final in that final section. - Done

That's it on a first read, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:20, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

- @The Rambling Man: I've addressed all of the issues listed above, let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 18:53, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - It's a really nice piece of work. I made a couple of tweaks, including standardising the use of "wikitable". If you really object, revert it, it's not a GA thing, but I see no good reason to hand-craft tables when "wikitable" does it all for us. I'm passing the nomination, well done. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:25, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    - Thanks TRM, I'm fine either way. As I say, I only used the original layout because I just stumbled across it being used elsewhere. Is it worth making the new table sortable also? Kosack (talk) 19:28, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
      - No problem. You could try, but you'd need to test it out properly as the row and col spans might be a bit havocky, but it might just work, the joy of the wikitable! col and row scopes would be marvellous too.... The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:37, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]