Talk:1920 Louisiana hurricane/GA1

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 18:27, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Afterwards it quickly weakened over land, before dissipating on September 23 over eastern Kansas." - Comma after "Afterwards".
"A ship reported a minimum central barometric pressure of 999 mbar (29.5 inHg) just prior to the storm's intensification into a hurricane." - Probably better suited in the Preparations and Impact section as opposed to the Meteorological history section.
"Continuing to intensify in the gulf, the hurricane attained Category 2 hurricane intensity at 0000 UTC on September 22, and subsequently reached its peak intensity with winds of 100 mph (160 km/h) and an estimated minimum pressure of 975 mbar (28.8 inHg)." - Gulf should be capitalized.
"The hurricane later made landfall at peak intensity near Houma, Louisiana at 0100 UTC later that day with maximum winds spanning 32 mi (51 km) from the center." - This sentence is worded strangely.
"Interurban railways also evacuated people out of the island,[7] with an estimated 4,500 people being evacuated from the island." - Repetition with "the island".
"The United States Coast Guard were ordered to be ready for immediate service in the event of an emergency,[9] while the US National Guard on strike duty in Galveston's Camp Hutchings were transferred to a barracks in Fort Crockett.[8][7]" - References should be in order.
"Along the coast and further inland, rainfall was concentrated primarily on the eastern half of the cyclone, with most of the rainfall occurring from September 21 to the 23rd." - Repetition with "rainfall".

Otherwise, I do not see anymore problems. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 18:27, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done - resolved the aforementioned issues. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 18:37, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 18:42, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]