Talk:1920–21 Burnley F.C. season/GA1
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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:03, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
Overall this article is good, though I do have a couple issues:
- "At the end of the season, Bert Freeman left Burnley after nine years at Turf Moor, during which time he had become the club's all-time leading goalscorer" Using the stadium in this sense feels odd, and you seem to do this a lot in the article. Mentioning the stadium is fine in the lead and when discussing games, but saying a player spent x years at this stadium feels false; they spent it with the team, rather, so all those should be modified.
- This is fairly standard usage in the UK, but I've changed them all to avoid confusion for readers from other countries.
- "Burnley picked up their first win of the season on 6 September 1920, beating Huddersfield Town 3–0 at Turf Moor with Bob Kelly, Tommy Boyle and Billy Nesbitt." With those three.. doing what? Scoring the goals?
- Done, don't know how I missed that before. -- BigDom 09:13, 5 April 2010 (UTC)
Just those two issues. I'll put the article on hold and pass when they're fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 01:09, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks very much for reviewing the article, I hope I have sufficiently addressed the comments you made. -- BigDom 09:13, 5 April 2010 (UTC)
- Looks good. I didn't see any other issues, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:21, 5 April 2010 (UTC)