Talk:1913 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cyclonebiskit (talk · contribs) 16:55, 1 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

General note(s)

Made some copyedits and factual corrections here and there so the data jives properly. Please double check these.
If you haven't already, you should apply for membership at newspapers.com through Wikipedia. There's likely a reasonable amount of information that can be gleaned from newspapers which is not presently in the article.

Hurricane One

After initially directing north-northwestward, the depression accelerated and intensified into a tropical storm on the following day. – subjects don't match for the contrast the sentence is set up to provide. A later sentence shows no change in the storm's direction so the first part of this doesn't really make sense.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Tropical Storm Three

Based on weather maps and ship data, a tropical depression formed near the west coast of Africa on August 26. – Need to add "weather maps/data indicate(d)" or "is believed to have formed" (or something to that effect) to preface the formation of the TD.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricane Five

An extratropical cyclone that developed offshore New England transitioned into a tropical storm on October 6 while situated about 325 mi (525 km) northwest of Bermuda. – More details on the movement and location of the precursor ET low is much desired.

Done--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

After becoming tropical, the storm continued to move southwestward and approached the Southeastern United States. – In line with the above comment, there's no mention of previous movement so "continued" doesn't make sense here. There was also a major change in direction that needs to be addressed earlier with the ET segment.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Continuing the theme of more movement info, mention of the system practically stalling over the Carolinas is needed.

That cannot be determined--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The Georgetown Railway and Light Company and the Home Telephone Company suffered the worst damage. – And that damage would be...? This just leaves me hanging with nothing to grasp on to. Aforementioned usage of a newspaper archive could very well remedy this issue.

I do not have a newspapers.com subscription, but I searched about this and unfortunately, I think that's about as specific as I can get--12george1 (talk) 01:49, 15 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

All-in-all a decent read, but very much needs attention from a newspaper archive. I'm placing the article on-hold for now to allow you time to address the above concerns. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 17:51, 1 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]