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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 03:56, 12 November 2011 (UTC) Lede[reply]

  • "The season was fairly active, with eleven storms, of which six became hurricanes and three became major hurricanes." - Firstly, it would be a good idea to change the wording of "storms" to "named storms" or "tropical cyclones", considering the fact that all tropical cyclones intensified further into tropical systems. Secondly, link whatever you choose to change to Tropical cyclone. Lastly, you should probably change "fairly active" to "below average" or "above average" based on the average number of TCs in 1906.
  • " The season started on June 8 when a weak tropical storm formed in the northern Caribbean Sea; although it struck the United States, no major impacts were recorded. July saw a period of inactivity, with no known storms." - I'd change "the season started" to "The first named storm" because the current wording makes it sound like that is when the season officially started, which was not the case.
  • "However, in August, the streak of inactivity ended with two storms, including a powerful hurricane. September brought three storms, including a deadly hurricane caused catastrophic impacts in Pensacola and Mobile. October included three storms, with a powerful hurricane that killed over 200 people. The final storm of the season impacted Cuba in early November and dissipated on November 9." - Which hurricanes? You don't have to be so broad.

Storms

Tropical Storm One

  • "The system continued traveling north-northwestward, making landfall near Panama City on June 13, quickly weakening to a tropical depression as the storm moved inland." - I'd change the underlined portion to "it".

-- More to come later, this is what I have so far. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 03:56, 12 November 2011 (UTC) Hurricane Two[reply]

  • "This first hurricane of the season was first noted in Santa Clara, Cuba, where rainy and windy conditions were observed on the afternoon of June 14, and many vessels sank during the storm" - Was the storm actually noted IN the city, as in, the cyclone was atop the location? If not, maybe you could find better wording? Also, do you have any idea of how many vessels sank, and any particular names?
  • "During the early morning hours of June 15, the system was thought to have entered the Florida Straits during the evening."- In the first part of the sentence, you say "the early morning hours", but you then turn around to end the sentence with "during the evening." This sentence is confusing, mind changing the wording a bit?
  • "The system continued to travel towards the west-northwest, steadily strengthening into a hurricane by the afternoon." - All right, you say that the storm traveled west-northwest, but in the track image, it shows west with an abrupt turn towards the northeast?
  • "On June 17, a minimum pressure of 979 mbar (hPa; 28.91 inHg) was recorded, as the hurricane passed over southern Florida. - No need for the second comma.
  • "The hurricane slowly intensified as it traveled offshore, continuing to strengthen throughout the day on June 17, eventually intensifying into a Category 2 hurricane by June 18." - This sentence is just filled with how the storm strengthened...You only need to say it strengthened once. :-)
  • " As the storm headed northwest, weakening began in the system, and the system became a tropical storm by June 21." - You mean northeast? Additionally, weakening occurred IN the system? How about the system began to weaken?
  • "Impacts caused by the hurricane were minimal—a boat was partially dismantled at Key West, and a wharf at Coconut Grove was also damaged." - What is a wharf? Is there a wikilink for it?

Hurricane Four

Hurricane Five

Hurricane Six

Tropical Storm Seven

Hurricane Eight

  • "This hurricane originated on October 4 near Barbados as a "cyclonic perturbation"; however, no closed circulation was evident in the system." - Closed circulations aren't IN the system, they are PART of the system. Therefore, I'd change "in" to "associated with".
  • "Barometric pressures began sinking in Panama as the system drifted,[15] and it was considered a tropical storm by October 8." - As it drifted? Where'd it drift?
  • " It began to drift north-northwestward later that day, intensifying into a weak hurricane as it drifted into the Gulf of Honduras." - As I recommended earlier, change "weak" to "minimal".
  • "However, the hurricane weakened to a tropical storm again on October 14 as it moved overland, and began to curve north-northwest, restrengthening to a major hurricane by October 17." - Location for first part of sentence?
  • " The hurricane continued traveling north-northwest; however, it was forced to re-curve south-southwest,[2] as the result of a high-pressure area." - As the result? Change to "as a result".
  • "The system traced into the Gulf of Mexico, and made a final landfall in Central America on October 23." - It traced into the Gulf of Mexico?

Hurricane Eleven

See Also

All in link, the article is a bit from Good Article status. However, most of these issues are minor, and will be able to be fixed relatively easy. For this reason, I am putting this article On Hold until the issues are addressed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 02:41, 16 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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