Talk:1903 Florida hurricane/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 17:11, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Why the {{clear}} below the lead?

Fixed, clearly :P --12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"also known as the 1903 Inchulva hurricane" - ref for it being called this name?

I'm gonna remove that. I couldn't find anything to prove it.--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You say "extensive" a lot in the lead, but I'm not sure that's appropriate. "Extensive" means "of great extent; wide; broad". So that makes sense when referring to the SE US, but not to two counties in Florida, or an island group

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"but re-intensified into a hurricane over the Gulf of Mexico on September 17. Peaking at 90 mph (150 km/h), equivalent to a strong Category 1 hurricane on the Saffir–Simpson hurricane wind scale, the storm made landfall near Panama City several hours later." - the bolded part doesn't work

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:40, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

First sentence of MH should be split up

Better?--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

On what basis was the peak intensity? Ship report? Land report? Something else?

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"and began to re-intensify over the gulf" - when referring to the Gulf of Mexico as a shorthand, it should be "Gulf", or otherwise just say "body of water"

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"As its heading backed to the north-northeast" - track suggest NNW

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Between 06:00 and 12:00 UTC on September 10, the United States Weather Bureau issued storm signals, equivalent to a tropical storm warning in 2012" - you can probably remove the year. The 2012 bit is confusing in 2016. Alternatively, use {{Currentyear}}

Good idea--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"but monetary losses and loss of life, if any, in the Bahamas are unknown" - not needed

Removed--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

" The lowest pressure at Jupiter dipped to 1003 mbar (29.63 inHg)[1] at 23:00 UTC on September 11." - is this notable/important? I feel it's the kind of thing people will just gloss over

I guess not. 1003 mbar isn't very low considering this was a hurricane.--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"In the Black section of the town, just one church stood after the hurricane." - this feels slightly uncomfortable to me... is African American OK? Also, were there multiple churches? If there was one, then this sentence is incredibly misleading. If you can't find that out, I'd cut it.

I should have looked into this earlier. Based on what I'm seeing, it appears that it wasn't as if the only thing left standing was a church. There were several building destroyed, though. There were four churches. Yes, African American is ok, except in the White House, according to some people :P--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"At the new building for the The Miami Metropolis," - is this correct?

No, just the one "The" :P --12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"The loss of electricity was restored by September 12" - didn't the storm make landfall on the 12th?

Actually, landfall was very late on September 11. The electricity was restored by the night of September 12. I fixed it--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Any use for List of Atlantic hurricanes or List of tropical cyclones as "See also" links? They're both dabs.

I'm gonna replace them with something more useful and relevant, like List of Florida hurricanes (1900–49)--12george1 (talk) 18:22, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All in all a decent article, just some unusual stuff that, IMO, looks like it's trying to fluff up the article a bit. With these fixes, I believe the article will be a fine good article. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:11, 16 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]