Talk:1901 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"There were fatal boating accidents in Virginia, with five fatalities there." isn't it redundant to say the boating accident was fatal and then say there were five fatalities. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

" In 2008, an additional hurricane was added to HURDAT, which existed in late August over the far eastern Atlantic Ocean." why is something common like the Atlatnic Ocean linked? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Thereafter, the storm moved generally northward across the eastern Gulf of Mexico and likely maintained the same intensity as a 40 mph (65 km/h) tropical storm.[4] On the east coast of Florida, a wind speed of 36 mph (58 km/h) was observed in Jupiter. At 21:00 UTC on June 13, the storm made landfall near Carrabelle, Florida, with winds of 40 mph (65 km/h).[4]" why mentioned 40 mph twice in 3 sentences given that the storm did not change in intensity for much of it's life. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"This storm was first observed on July 1 about 225 miles (360 km) north of the modern day French Guiana–Suriname border. " "this storm" to "The storm" I can't remember where but I've been told circa 2012 on a GA Review (might have been 1986 PHS) not to do this. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That seems kinda weird. How about a compromise with something like "The second storm of the season"?--12george1 (talk) 20:35, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Early the following day, the cyclone brushed East Caicos as a strong tropical storm. It curved northeastward late on July 9 and resumed intensification,[4] likely due to the Gulf Stream.[7]" what made the Gulf Stream favorable? warm waters? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane

"The storm is known as San Cirilo in Puerto Rico. Heavy rainfall occurred, particularly in the southwestern portion of the island, with 17.22 in (437 mm) of precipitation observed at Hacienda La Perla." I know this may seem hard to do, but mind combing these two sentences? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"After reaching the Gulf of Mexico the next day, the storm continued to intensified and reached hurricane status on August 12." "continued to intensified" to "continue to intensify" for obvious reasons. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Ships reports and historical weather maps indicated that this storm was first observed early on September 12,[15] " see note about two comments above about using "this". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'm starting to notice this now, but in general, it gets a little bland when you say "the storm" as often as a hot and humid day in Florida. Could "the system" or "the cyclone" work? I've seen you use the former in the past. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Originally there were 45 uses of "the storm". I've cut it down to 35. Unfortunately, even the other terms I've used may become repetitive eventually, as I don't have names to use and I don't think there aren't too many situations where the word "it" is appropriate.--12george1 (talk) 20:35, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, either I've become more use to mistakes that they're no longer mistakes or there are no other minor ones in this article. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:53, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I've done everything. Let me know if it's not satisfactory. Thanks for the review--12george1 (talk) 20:35, 10 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]