Talk:1865 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1
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Reviewer: Marcusmax(speak) 00:07, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- "The 1865 Atlantic hurricane season included two landfalling hurricanes, with one that caused over 325 deaths." - I'm not sure this is really the best way to start off the article. I personally think a more generalized statement about the season would be better in this instance. A statement about how many storms total formed, and where this stacks up with other Atlantic seasons would be more on par with other season articles in this time range.
- I did that so it wouldn't be such a generic opener. I hate when season articles start with "was an annual event" or "had X storms". It's just so boring. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
- There is a lack of internal links in the lead, especially with the many geographic locations you have referenced. One internal link within the entire section is not enough.
- Good call. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
Tropical Storm One
[edit]- Reading the source, it would seem you could elaborate a little bit more on this incident. It might also help to include the ship's name as well.
- I don't think I can, actually. The article contains all of the info on the shipwreck. I did add the name though. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
Tropical Storm Three
[edit]- "On August 22 the storm made its closest approach to the state, producing winds of around 45 mph (72 km/h) along the coast. Around that time, the storm attained peak winds of 70 mph (120 km/h)." - These two statements contradict each other, how can the storm be producing 45 mph winds while also attaining winds of 70 mph. I assume the 70mph winds were farther out at sea, so if that is the case it needs to be clarified.
- Alright, I clarified. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
Hurricane 4
[edit]- "A small hurricane, it tracked westward and struck Guadeloupe as a fully-developed hurricane." - I would replace "hurricane" with "storm" or "cyclone" for better flow.
- Agreed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
- "The overall death toll was estimated at 300, including 36 on Marie-Galante." - Can we get an inline citation for this?
- No prob. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
- Lets get an internal link to Louisiana somewhere in here.
- Now that Louisiana is linked in the lede, I don't think it's necessary. It's a fairly common term that I don't think needs to be linked. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
Hurricane 7
[edit]- "The storm brushed the country's coast with high waves for several days, causing $300,000 in damage (1865 USD)." - Can we get an inline citation for this claim?
- See H4. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
Given the age of this topic, this is an exceptional article. I would like to see the 8 changes mentioned above made before I can pass this though. Will check back tomorrow. -Marcusmax(speak) 00:51, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
- Yay, thanks. I believe they were all addressed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
- Yep, looks like I can pass this. Good job on yet another GA. -Marcusmax(speak) 12:39, 4 August 2011 (UTC)