Talk:1804 Antigua–Charleston hurricane/GA1

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Reviewer: Secret (talk · contribs) 19:18, 15 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article sometime this week. Thanks Secret ^account 19:18, 15 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Great read, only some minor nitpicks

"By 4 September, the storm arrived at the Bahamas and turned northward before approaching the coast of northern Florida by 6 September." Shouldn't by be "on".
"Remaining offshore, it eventually came ashore along the coastline of Georgia and South Carolina while producing mostly southeasterly winds" - Bit repetitive with "Remaining offshore" and then suddenly mentioning came ashore. Fix.
"Maritime losses offshore both states were significant," - grammar.
"3 September as it swept past Saint Barthélemy, Saint Kitts, and Antigua on 3 September," Remove the second mention of "3 September".
"Betsy was stripped of its freight and somewhat injured" - Ships can't be "somewhat injured", reword.
"littered the island which was completely inundated during the storm." - comma after island
"and at some, vessels became stacked upon each other." Some what? Wharves?
"numerous animals were also killed in the flood, leaving behind carcasses." Well when an animal dies, it become a carcass, so "leaving behind carcasses" is redundant, remove.
"Several ships sank in Boston's harbor, while at Salem, the South Church's steeple was toppled.[6]" Are you talking about this storm, or the unrelated storm a week later? Clarify.
No close paraphrasing concerns, all the sources are reliable, image is free, however the PD tag should be fixed on the image.

yesyesyes i fixed these issues, do i get a hug from you now Cloudchased (talk) 02:56, 1 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]