Talk:11 (Bryan Adams album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:35, 20 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Done 2 dab links, 2 dead external links

Lead

Done Could do with a rewrite to form a NPOV, especially the 3rd paragraph, which is contradictory ("The album was a commercial success... the album has been viewed as a commercial failure").

Conception

Done ...it was his eleventh studio album, if you include... Don't use second person pronouns, maybe ...it was his eleventh studio album, when album x is included
Done ..significant portions of the album was produced.. were produced
Done They'd record the album.. → Vallance and Adams recorded the album..
Done ..which they'd usually carry along.. → ..which they usually carried along..
Done There are more contractions used in the rest of the article which need to be expanded

Writing and themes

Done They hooked up.. - remove colloquial language

Release

Done The finishing touches to the album was done → were done
Done B-sides are usually written with a capital 'B'
Done Write a summarising sentence for the reviews

What do you mean? --TIAYN (talk) 15:48, 21 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm sorry I missed this one. I mean something like "11 received mixed reviews from critics." Adabow (talk · contribs) 03:22, 28 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Done "10 thousand" → ten thousand
Done All numbers less than ten should be written out in full, however I strongly recommend that you do this for all numbers below 100.

Track listing

Done Needs a reference for writers

Is that really neccessary? The source for this would be the album itself, it would be like sourcing the cover.. Second, its not usually referenced in other GAs i've seen. --TIAYN (talk) 08:16, 21 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, the album liner notes are fin to use as a source; you can use {{Cite music release notes}} Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:34, 22 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Personnel

Done Needs a source

Is that really neccessary? The source for this would be the album itself, it would be like sourcing the cover.. Second, its not usually referenced in other GAs i've seen. --TIAYN (talk) 08:16, 21 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Release history

Done Needs refs and completion

Is that really neccessary? The source for this would be the album itself, it would be like sourcing the cover.. Second, its not usually referenced in other GAs i've seen. --TIAYN (talk) 08:16, 21 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Charts and certifications

Done References should be next to the chart name, not the peak position. For certifications you can place the ref in either cell.
Done Link charts
What's up with the European Albums Chart whacked on the end?
- It charted, but they don't know what position it reached..

--TIAYN (talk) 08:14, 21 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

- look like number three Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:38, 21 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Done --TIAYN (talk) 15:48, 21 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Media

Done Does the deluxe edition cover add anything to the article? It uses the same photograph as the original, and is just recoloured. I feel it fails WP:NFCC #8.
Done The same goes for File:BA-I Thought-Video.jpg it is not discussed in the article.

There is a lot of work to do, butI will place the review on hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:18, 20 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the amendments; I will pass the article now. Just a couple of final comments: why is the European Albums Chart not in alphabetical order? The final sentence of the lead also needs a rewrite. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:10, 3 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]