Talk:10th Battalion (Australia)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk · contribs) 06:32, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure I've ever GA-reviewed an Australian battalion article before, but I guess it's never too late to start... ;-) Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:32, 9 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Toolbox checks -- no dab or EL issues.

Structure/prose/content -- went a bit wild with the copyediting so let me know if you disagree with anything; outstanding points/queries:

Not a fan of little flags in infoboxes, nor with the resultant country link, and there's certainly no requirement to have them, but will leave to you to decide about keeping.
We say "Drawing personnel from South Australia" in the main body, but "The battalion was completely recruited from South Australia" in the lead, which is a considerably stronger statement. If the lead is correct and the source supports it, suggest "Drawing personnel exclusively from South Australia" or some such.
"the battalion underwent a short period of individual training throughout September ... The following month, collective training took place" -- I assume "individual" and "collective" mean the 10th trained on its own initially, then in concert with its sister (or brother?!) battalions, but not sure the average punter would get this straight off...
"bound for overseas" sounds a bit weak -- the captain had some idea of his destination, didn't he? ;-)
I think you could afford to add a little more detail on the battalion's activities between April and December 1915, if indeed its troops took part in any notable actions before withdrawing.
"subsequently launched the Spring Offensive" -- just checking, when you say "subsequently" do you just mean "later" (i.e. after the transfer of troops following Russia's exit) or "consequently" (i.e. because of the transfer of troops following Russia's exit)?

Images/references -- No issues I could see.

Nice work, Rupert -- and how can anyone resist that famous shot of the digger and the roo at the Pyramids? Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

G'day, Ian, thanks for your copy edit and review. I've made a few tweaks/additions based on your comments above. Please let me know if you think anything else is required. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 10:14, 14 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi mate, tweaked a little more and happy to pass now -- well done. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 15:19, 14 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers, Ian, I appreciate your help. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 19:52, 14 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]