Talk:...Baby One More Time Tour/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:41, 11 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
Needs minor tweaking, see below. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:54, 11 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Please add Alternate text for the infobox image. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:54, 11 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The ..Baby One More Time Tour is the debut concert tour by You don't debut a concert tour, change it to The ..Baby One More Time Tour is the first concert tour
visited the United States and Canada. remove the.
with tour dates released a remove tour
Tommy Hilfiger was chosen as the tour sponsor. The concept and costumes were designed by Spears. Doesnot flow well, consider Designer Tommy Hilfiger was chosen as the tour sponsor but the concept and costumes were designed by Spears.
Tommy Hilfiger was announced as the main tour sponsor on May 12, 1999. Invert On May 12, 1999, Tommy Hilfiger was announced as the main sponsor for the tour.
At the time of the -> During the time
Tommy Hilfiger spoke about the sponsorship -> Remove Tommy, people should be addressed by their surname.
were released in Rolling Stone -> were published in Rolling Stone

Thank you, i corrected the prose and added the alternate text, so

Done. ---Xwomanizerx (talk) 14:06 11 January 2010 (UTC)