Talk:"Weird Al" Yankovic in 3-D/GA1

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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 02:31, 23 September 2011 (UTC)

Pre-review comments

I will probably not be able to get to this review until this weekend. Hope you don't mind. This week is pretty busy with school, and most of the time I will have to be on Wikipedia will be geared towards an FLC. — Status {^talk_contribs  02:37, 27 September 2011 (UTC)

No problem.--Gen. Quon (talk) 22:36, 28 September 2011 (UTC)

I have a bit of free time on my hands right now, so I'll begin a little bit of work on it now. Won't be much, but it will be something to start with. xD — Status {^talk_contribs  23:21, 28 September 2011 (UTC)

OK, I'm going to work on it as you go.--Gen. Quon (talk) 21:23, 29 September 2011 (UTC)

Infobox

• The sources for the genres are not reliable. Yahoo says comedy is a category, while Discogs is just not a reliable source for anything on Wikipedia.
• Remove the records on "Scotti Brothers Records" as per guidelines to drop words like "records", "music" etc in infoboxes.
• Alt tag for image?

Lead

• by American singer-songwriter
• Include the date of release.
• The album was one of many produced by former The McCoys guitarist Rick Derringer. → Seems a bit unrelated here. The rest of the paragraph seems to relate only to the release.
• The album was Yankovic's second release and the follow-up to his his modestly successful debut LP "Weird Al" Yankovic. → A bit repetitive, no?
• The music on In 3-D is → "Weird Al" Yankovic in 3-D is
• In 3-D is also notable for being → "Weird Al" Yankovic in 3-D is also notable for being
• In 3-D was met with mostly → "Weird Al" Yankovic in 3-D was met with generally
• A bit more detail about it's commercial performance? Just saying it peaked at number 17 on Billboard 200 doesn't give an insight of how it did throughout the world.
• No mention of the other singles? (I see there were two others)
• The lead seems to be in need of a lot of work. I haven't gone through the entire article yet, so I'll go back to this once I know more about the album and can give some suggestions on what should be added. It seems to lack some a variety of things.

Production

• "Originals" and "Parodies and polka" should be moved to its own section called something like "music" or "composition", as it relates more to that.

Recording

• Studio → what kind of studio?
• To produce the album, Yankovic brought in former The McCoys guitarist Rick Derringer who also produced Yankovic's first album. → Brought in what?

What does this mean? He brought in Rick Derringer to produce it. Straight forward.

• Backing Yankovic were Jon "Bermuda" Schwartz on drums, Steve Jay on bass, and Jim West on guitar → Backing on what?

Again, what does this mean? They were backing on drums, bass, and guitar respectively.

• During the first album session, five original songs were recorded. They included "Nature Trail To Hell," "Mr. Popeil," "Buy Me a Condo," "Midnight Star," and "That Boy Could Dance". → Elaborate; "first album session" sounds like its referring to his previous album. What about something like: "During the first recording sessions for the album..."
• Two months later, Yankovic began recording the five parodies and polka medley that would appear on the album, "Eat It", "King of Suede", "I Lost On Jeopardy", "Theme from Rocky XIII (The Rye or the Kaiser)", "The Brady Bunch," and "Polkas on 45". → So none of the other ones made it? Why?

I'm confused. All the songs made it. Yankovic had two recording sessions. In the first one five originals were recorded, in the second, six parodies/polkas were recorded. All of them "made it."

• I can't go through any of this section anymore. There a lot of issues with it. I suggest you copyedit it completely and try to find some more information to fill in with. It just reads like a complied list of information put into paragraphs.

• I'm gonna go ahead and put the review on hold for a period of one week for you to look through the article again. For the above reasons, and the fact that there are also no "Background" and "Singles" sections, which are vital in album articles. — Status {^talk_contribs  02:11, 1 October 2011 (UTC)

OK, I'll try to clean-up what I can. I also asked for a Copy-edit, so hopefully that will come soon.--Gen. Quon (talk) 00:09, 3 October 2011 (UTC)

I'm not seeing much of anything being done in this review... — Status {^talk_contribs 20:17, 8 October 2011 (UTC)

Result

I'm sorry, but I'm gonna have to fail the article. I don't see much work being done with it at all. I can see that you haven't been very active recently, so maybe when/if you have more time to work on getting the article to GA status, I would be willing to review the article again. Best, — Status {^talk_contribs 21:54, 9 October 2011 (UTC)

Yeah, other things came up. Sorry about that. I'll get it there one of these days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:37, 22 October 2011 (UTC)