Draft talk:Umbilical-urachal sinus

Dr. Weiner

When it's time to upload your final draft, I will give you instructions. Don't try to submit things until we get there!
Introduction is not a section. It's just the stuff at the top. Leave out the header.
Unless there is something actively wrong with them, do NOT change the words that were already on the page. Just add new material.
Link HEAVILY to other wikipedia pages. The first time you use a term, it should be linked. You have a good start on this, but you need a lot more! You don't need to link the words every time you use them. There are a bunch of words that are never linked and some that are linked many times and don't need to be.
Make sure the language is approachable. Some of this uses unnecessary jargon or is excessively complicated.
Good use of wikipedia's structure here, including subheadings.
Every piece of information needs a citation. If you took all the info in a paragraph from one place you can just cite at the end of the paragraph, but no paragraph should be uncited and there should not be a sentence after the last citation.
I liked how you formatted your list in signs and symptoms. Use this again in other lists.
There are some relevant images in wikimedia commons that would help with anatomy, symptoms, and/or mechanism. I encourage you to make use of them.
Missing research directions.
Sources need to be cited using wikipedia's citation manager.

I think the reader would benefit with less complicated language. Im asking myself if the person with this disease is the mother or child.
Maybe instead of using the word patient, use the word "child" or "newborn". A lot of the sentencing makes it seem like the patient is an adult.
I think you can go into more information about the prognosis,
Your section of epidemiology would benefit from providing a citation to understand where you got your information
Overall, great draft!
Your wikipedia structure looks really good and I really liked the listing of your causes and symptom!

Good job on linking other wiki pages to certain words throughout the page.
Add pictures if you can find some through Wikimedia.
Make sure you are citing throughout your sandbox.
Only link a word once within the sandbox so it doesn't read/look very overwhelming.

Looks like some sections like anatomy and embryology section and others are missing citations.

Expanding on epidemiology and on other sections while citing sources will help build out the info. Bsrt1995 (talk) 16:39, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This is an interesting topic; I have never heard of this condition.
The way you linked different words and subjects throughout the article was really good.
This article would be a bit more interesting if you could find pictures of the actual condition or of the surgical procedure.
To make this even better you should consider making it clear to the reader whether this condition is more prominent in infants, children or adults.