Draft talk:Terson's syndrome

Dr. Weiner

You have a really good start on the information! Once you get your formatting sorted out, you'll have a good basis to work from!
Do not try to submit your work as the page! This is the rough draft stage. You have made things more complicated for yourself! You should just be editing on your sandbox.
This does not match the formatting guides or the rubric.
Please come see me to get help with wikipedia's editor. You are not using the headers or other tools that you need to use!
The original abstract was much better. Keep it and add as needed. Don't replace things without a good reason! I see that you tucked it at the bottom. Leave it as the abstract, where it belongs!
Every piece of information needs a citation. If you took all the info in a paragraph from one place you can just cite at the end of the paragraph, but nothing longer than a paragraph should be uncited.
Link HEAVILY to other wikipedia pages. The first time you use a term, it should be linked.
Use simple terminology whenever possible. This is not written in a lay accessible manner.
Sources need to be cited using wikipedia's citaton manager.
Links to sources outside wikipedia should be formatted through wikipedia's links and given descriptive text, not just left as links.
When you summarize recent research, actually summarize what has been found if the work is completed! Don't just talk about it vaguely.
Don't use case studies in recent research when there are good recent medical studies! Case studies are a last resort if there is nothing better! There is a LOT of recent research I found quickly. You have one article and some case studies! If you need help finding research, come talk to me.

Sweiner02 (talk) 05:34, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Cierra Garrett

This article contains lots of good information, good job on finding everything!
For the headings like "signs and symptoms" and "challenges in diagnoses" try switching the style of the text to 'heading'. Doing this should add sections in between categories
Don't forget to add in-text citations. To do this, at the end of your sentence where you used information from another source, click the "cite" button at the top of the page
Add pictures

CierraGarrett (talk) 01:14, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Maria Rizwan

A lot of great detail is added into the page and I like that
I know others have said this but adding heavily cited Wikipedia pages to everything will help it give that wiki page look.
Also make sure the links are clickable. I was not able to click on the links that were added and go to that page.
Maybe if you can find some pics that could help it would look less like a lot of words and something else for the eyes to see. Mariarizwan100 (talk) 17:13, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Perla Solis

•You have a lot of information on your wiki article which I believe it is great but I would make sure you have the formatting correctly. I do see that some of the headings are the similar maybe try to make sure the other headings stand out so it makes it easier for readers and the general population because remember anyone can have access to it.

•I would also try to link words that people might not know what they mean so they can be redirected to other wikiarticles that can help them understand what is going on.

•II would add pictures especially for the symptoms. I believe you can find and image showing stiff necks, or if you want to be creative you can make your own "emoji" of nauseous.

•I did like how you formatted the misdiagnoses by number it makes it look very organized and eye appealing, great job overall! Perlaawikiarticle (talk) 05:21, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Nina Idichandy-Peer Review

Hello,

The information that you have is very thorough and thought out, and its clear you did you research. I would try to make it have some more organizational and structural flow. I think the information could be organized so that readers are able to clearly interpret the information. I think that in each section there are some paragraphs so that does help to separate some of the information. I would try adding some pictures as well if applicable. Genome replication (talk) 20:03, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]