Draft talk:Diego j34/Sacrifice

Peer Review

Your edits are rooted in evidence from reliable sources which is the first thing I noticed you did well. However, you have some grammatical errors. For example, you are missing a comma after "Therefore". Also, the flow of your passage about Hinduism seems wordy. I think it could flow better and come about more naturally. Other than that, the edit seems to be effective in adding useful information. JayVelez (talk) 18:42, 9 October 2024 (UTC)