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The article was approved by TBrandley 03:47, 22 November 2012 (UTC).

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The Unnatural (The X-Files)

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Nominator(s): Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:04, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

I am re-nominating this for A-Class because I would like to promote it to FA. Please have a look over it and tell me if it needs anything else. Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:04, 18 November 2012 (UTC)

• Comments

• "a towering foul ball" -> Probably baseball jargon, can we just explain why it's impressive? He hits it far/fast/accurately etc.
• Why is Martin not mentioned at the first instance of his character's name?
• "In the present day" -> it's 1999, not 2024.
• "he purposely plays badly" -> I'd use "deliberately"
• "and puns the phrase, "In the beginning"" -> I've never seen "pun" used as a verb; perhaps "and acts as a pun on the phrase "in the beginning"."?
• "a character whom had appeared" -> I believe this should just be "who"
• I wonder if the block quote might be better put to use as a quote box instead
• When you first mention Mark Snow, note that he's the composer for the series, rather than just this episode
• Ref 13 cites a page range and needs to use "pp.", not "p."
• I believe it was Crisco who pointed it out to me before but I'm not convinced Starpulse is reliable.

• I think that's all I've got. GRAPPLE X 05:23, 19 November 2012 (UTC)

  There we go. How's it look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 21:32, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

  Made a few minor changes to homogenise the article with the other FAs (keeping the quote box colour the same). Support in light of the changes. GRAPPLE X 22:42, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

• Support TBrandley 03:47, 22 November 2012 (UTC)
  
  

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