Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Siege of Malakand
I've been putting the finishing touches to this article for the last couple of days, and filling in the red links. It may be a tad dependant on one or two sources, and the "aftermath/consequences of the battle" I'm not 100% happy with, but some suggestions and opinions would be most welcome. SGGH speak! 20:38, 4 June 2007 (UTC)
Cam
[edit]Just a few picky points..
- In the infobox, you list tribal strength as "10,000-100,000". You might want to narrow that number down a bit, since that's an extremely wide perameter, and it determines the extent of the British Victory (If it was 10,000 tribal troops, it's a close battle, with the British simply being better armed, if it's closer to 100,000, that changes the degree of how staggering the British Victory was.)
fixed
- In the opening paragraph, the word "Poorly" is used three times, you might want to change this.
fixed
- tons of notes, makes the bottom area somewhat cluttered. You might want to condense them, like Carom and I've done for Battle of Messines (note the A,B,C,D format).
begun, but its a long process!I think I've got near enough all of them
Other than that, very good. I'd nominate it for GA. I'll look over it some more when I've got more time. Well Written. Cam 03:19, 5 June 2007 (UTC)
- Has made GA. SGGH speak! 19:45, 6 June 2007 (UTC)
- Can anyone offer some comments on this peer review relating to FAC before I try it? I'd rather have some feedback first than just plunge into it. SGGH speak! 10:54, 11 June 2007 (UTC)