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Typhoon Melor (2015)

I've listed this article for peer review because this fully details the history, preparations and impact, and preparing this article to be a Good article. Thanks, TagaSanPedroAko (talk) 10:36, 6 February 2016 (UTC)

Here's a few observations:

• The lead seems too short.
• "The PAGASA was about to name the tropical storm as Nonoy, yet it was named Nona after entering the Philippine Area of Responsibility on December 12, owing to political reasons": this sentence disrupts the flow a bit and left me with some unanswered questions. For example, why did the PAGASA choose a different name and what was the political reason? Perhaps it should be in a separate paragraph with some clarification added. Also, the article switches to using Nona in the Metro Manila section, then goes back to using Melor.
• "with 15,000 homes, 24,000 families (108,000 people) in evacuation centers": was this supposed to say "homes destroyed"?
• "damages amounted to ₱6.45 billion (US$136.4 million)" this conflicts with the amount listed in the lead.

I hope this helps. Praemonitus (talk) 22:15, 19 February 2016 (UTC)

I made changes to the article:

• I expanded the lead section
• Added the word "destroyed" after "15,000 homes"

Other changes to be followed up. Thanks.--TagaSanPedroAko (talk) 05:00, 5 March 2016 (UTC)

I followed up the two other changes to be done:

• Added a section regarding the naming of the typhoon.
• Removed conflict of the lead section and the "Impact" section.

Thanks to all the efforts. --TagaSanPedroAko (talk) 05:13, 5 March 2016 (UTC)

I did another change that I forgot:

• Made the name of the typhoon consistent on the "Impact section" by using Nona instead on most cases.

Thanks. I just placed it to B this time.--TagaSanPedroAko (talk) 05:28, 5 March 2016 (UTC)