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Space Shuttle Columbia disaster

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This has a failed FA, but I think it has improved since then. I would be appropriate if both Shuttle disasters progressed on towards FA. -- TechsMechs 04:25, 18 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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It's a pretty good article and fairly thorough for the most part. Here's a few (hopefully useful) comments:

  • There are a few more entries that could use a link: thermal protection, external tank, NASA, reentry, O-ring, risk-management, reinforced carbon/carbon, Orbital Maneuvering System, Indian Ocean, telemetry, solid rocket motors
  • I think the following entries need some sort of citation:
    • "Apparently, even the best technical servicing available could not compensate for this fatal design flaw"
    • "Bipod Foam Ramps had fallen off on at least three previous Shuttle flights"
    • "NASA management seemed to grow complacent and accustomed to these phenomena when no serious consequences resulted from these earlier episodes"
    • "Two examples of this were failure to honor engineer requests for imaging to inspect possible damage, and failure to respond to engineer requests about status of astronaut inspection of the left wing"
    • "NASA management did not honor the requests and in some cases intervened to stop DOD from assisting"
  • What is SOFI?
  • I couldn't find any coverage of what safety measures were implemented by NASA prior to the launch of the next mission.

Thank you! — RJH (talk) 14:56, 23 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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