Wikipedia:Peer review/Hank Williams, Sr./archive1

Hank Williams

I am requesting a peer review as a first step toward making this a Featured Article. This article is the first collaboration project of the Country Music Wikiproject. A lot of work has been done so far but we would like fresh sets of eyes to go over the article and suggest ways to improve it to Featured Article quality. Of course, any help in copyediting and referencing is whole-heartedly welcomed!--WilliamThweatt 03:01, 15 August 2006 (UTC)

• Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 23:42, 16 August 2006 (UTC)

• You can also check out the WP:MUSTARD guidelines, at least some of which apply here.
  • Most music genres and styles are not proper nouns, and should not be capitalized (e.g. "rock'n'roll" and "honky tonk")
  • Wikipedia I believe uses rock and roll, so unless there's a good reason to use a different format, please stick with that.
  • A single section for "Biography" with subsections would be better than separate top-level sections for childhood, career and death. All sections should have a paragraph or two of text, even if there are subsections. (e.g. the "childhood" section (if kept) should have 2 paragraphs or so summarizing the most important info in the subsections)
  • Some statements needs cites (e.g. "He was born with a mild undiagnosed case of spina bifida occulta, a disease of the spinal column, which gave him life-long pain—a factor in his later abuse of alcohol and drugs" and "two singles for Sterling Records, "Never Again" (1946) and "Honky Tonkin'" (1947), both of which were successful." - anything related to the relative success of a recording should be cited). There should not be any sections (nor paragraphs, really) without citations at all.
  • The note under "Later career" needs to be acted upon.
  • Some overwikifying, I think.
  • The "legacy and influences" section is really poor, and doesn't really cover his legacy or influences.
  • The "Selected list of cover versions of Hank Williams songs" needs to be removed unless there's a coherent, neutral and non-WP:OR way to present it - who selected this list, and why? Same thing with "Tributes".
  • More sound samples would be nice, ideally with a description of how each sample is specifically relevant to his life
  • "Quotes" should be moved to Wikiquote, linked from here and deleted.
  • For such an incredibly important figure, more references are needed, especially scholarly and critical evaluations.
  • Not sure all the external links meet WP:EL.
• Tuf-Kat 01:24, 29 August 2006 (UTC)

• • Thank you. I requested peer review two weeks ago and you're the first to make a serious effort to help improve the article. It is much appreciated. We're hoping to produce an article worthy of FA status, but we realize that, although it has been improved, it's still far from our goal. Your suggestions are all excellent and I will work on implementing them over the next few days.--WilliamThweatt 04:07, 29 August 2006 (UTC)