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Blue Iguana

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I've listed this article for peer review because…I would like to bring it up to FA Status. Before I go through that I'd like to be made aware of any shortcomings, etc. Thanks, Mike Searson (talk) 22:01, 1 March 2008 (UTC)

RJH review

Overall a fine piece of work. Nice job! Here are a few comments:

• The lede section isn't really a summary of the article. Two of the three paragraphs focus on the conservation section. I'd like to see a more balanced introduction, per Wikipedia:Lead_section.
• "Blue iguanas have excellent vision, which allows them to detect shapes and motions at long distances." What is "long" in this context? Can this be more precise?
• Can the "Mating" section give some information about how mates are selected? Do they mate for life; just long enough to copulate; males build "harems", &c.?
• In the scientific literature, are the units in SI or US? (See Wikipedia:MoS#Which_system_to_use.) It's a scientific article so it seems like SI should be the main units.
• The first use of a unit (feet, m, inch, pounds, &c.) needs to be wikilinked. I think there should be a non-breaking space between the value and the unit for SI values.
• The date fields in the citations have an inconsistent format. There are dates in the form "2/8/2007", "2005-05-23" or "May 26, 2004". Full dates should also be linked, thus: May 26, 2004.
• The page could use some more images.

Thanks.—RJH (talk) 22:48, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

• • Thanks for taking the time to review it. I will work on the Lead(lede). I do not know how precise I can get on the vision, I'll look into it. They do not appear to mate for life, this is a tricky area as a few years ago these animals were on the brink of extinction. I'm a Yank, so the units are US, sorry about that; I'll attempt a conversion. I will take your advise on wikilinking the units and be more consistent on the dates. As for more pictures, I'll work on that...the animals I own are not pure but hybrids with Lesser Caymans and Cubans...pure bred specemins are only found in zoos and on Grand Cayman.--Mike Searson (talk) 05:26, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
    • Thank you.—RJH (talk) 16:55, 11 March 2008 (UTC)

SandyGeorgia review

• Some of the sources are missing lastaccessdates; some are also missing publishers, examples:
  • Blue Iguanas get helping hand to recovery", April 26, 2005.
  • Hatchlings revive rarest lizard on earth", October 6, 2006.
• There are also formatting issues in the lastaccessdates, examples:
  • Retrieved on 9 May 2006. (unlinked)
  • Retrieved on September 8, 2007.  (linked incorrectly)
    • I think I found all of these, apparently using "newspaper" in the template does not work?

• There are WP:HYPHENs instead of endashes on page ranges in citations; you can ask Brighterorange (talk · contribs) to run a script to address them.

• • • I put in a request
• It would be nice if the books in Further reading had ISBNs.

• • • I stripped this out, everything in there was cited in the references so I removed it for redundancy.

• External links might need pruning per WP:EL, WP:NOT; a comprehensive featured article will have covered everything in the text, so there should be little need for external links, each of them should be there for a defensible reason.

• • • I culled the nonessential links.

• Capitalization has to be worked out: the article title is Blue Iguana, but the first line says Blue iguana.

• • • All sources were equally divided on this (literally) I went with Caps on each, same as birds.

• I'm not certain on capitalization here ... and is a National Symbol of the Cayman Islands.
• There are a few missing conversions, see {{convert}}, examples:
  • Females were found to occupy territories of 0.6 acres and males an average of 1.4 acres with overlap in common usage areas, indicating that the Blue iguanas chose to maintain a population density of 4-5 animals per hectare.

• A few WP:MOSNUM mixups on spelling out vs. digits, examples:
  • Anywhere from one to twenty-one eggs are usually laid in ...
  • Individuals are aggressively territorial from the age of about 3 months onward.
• Another hyphen instead of endash, but Brighterorange should pick these up:
  • Surveys in 2003 indicated a total population in the range of 5-15 individuals.
• There is some incorrect punctuation in image captions, see WP:MOS#Captions regarding the difference in punctuation for full sentences vs. sentence fragments.
• Run through the entire article for issues of WP:MOSDATE#Precise language, example:
  • The program now contains only pure specimens, ...
• Check wikilinking throughout, for example, certainly San Diego Zoo, in ...
  • the species by Tandora Grant of the San Diego Zoo's Center for Conservation and Research for Endangered Species (CRES).
• See Giant Otter and Sea otter for recent FA examples that contain folklore or popular culture (can't remember what the section is called) interactions with humans.

I'll ask Casliber (talk · contribs) and Marskell (talk · contribs) to peek in, as they've both written similar articles. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:10, 16 March 2008 (UTC)

Thanks, Sandy. I made a few of these changes and will implement more this coming week.--Mike - Μολὼν λαβέ 02:21, 16 March 2008 (UTC)

Review by bibliomaniac15 (talk · contribs)

It's a very fine article. I remember reading over it when I saw the GA nomination. Here's some things you might want to include:

• What is the CR doing up in the taxobox? It leads to a StatusCritical template, but I don't know what it does.
• The etymology of the scientific name is mentioned, but it would be great if the actual Greek could be provided.
• I think the organization of the Anatomy and physiology section could be improved by moving the information about senses to a subsection.
• The five nonprofit organizations mentioned in the lead could be stated more explicitly.

Overall a very well cited and comprehensive article. bibliomaniac15 Midway upon life's journey... 23:40, 19 March 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for the Feedback!

• CR is for "Critically Endangered", it was in the taxobox before I started editing and I've seen it on every other reptile article I've worked on.
• I'll add the Greek...EXCELLENT suggestion!
• Good suggestion, I'll make the change.
• Will do!

Thanks again!--Mike - Μολὼν λαβέ 00:04, 20 March 2008 (UTC)