User talk:Narehsahakian/sandbox

Summary

The author provides both positive and negative effects of earthquakes, including mental health, health deficits following trauma, as well as identifying the importance and the limitations of studying earthquakes.

Major Points

I appreciated that the author incorporated both positive and negative health effects of earthquakes, as it created a sense of unbiasedness throughout the article. Overall the tone of this article is professional and non-opinionated. There are plenty of sources used, with some sentences including multiple sources. This created a sense of trustworthiness that the information was accurate/factual. Similarly, the language used is key, such as "it is predicted" in section 9.4, distinguishing between more concrete evidence and predictions in the field.

Minor Points

There are a few misspelled words and grammatical errors throughout, such as in the last sentence of section 9.1. Otherwise, sentence structure seems to flow, and the section titles are clear and concise. Emarieg15 (talk) 19:38, 18 November 2015 (UTC)

Summary

This section is about the positive and negative mental health impacts of earthquakes. When someone is exposed to trauma, this leads to an increase in substance abuse and mental illness. Some view the trauma as a will to grow stronger and help others.

Major Points

This section follows the five pillars of WP and with a neutral point of view. There are great points made in this article,and I suggest some of the sentences can be moved around like "Those with the most exposure suffer..." can come before the sentence "Research following the Christchurch earthquakes..." in section 9.1. Also in section 9.2, is there any research on what they did to obtain a sense of community? A specific such as religion or organized events for support, etc. In section 9.3 PTSD is mentioned frequently, I suggest adding a link to a page that explains PTSD.

Minor Points

The citation should be doubled checked; I found the Editing Wikipedia booklet very helpful and will use myself. Overall the structure seems fine. Mairaeo (talk) 00:21, 19 November 2015 (UTC)