Talk:Changzhou Ancient Canal

Evaluation

This article is about the ancient canal in my hometown Changzhou, I hope someone can take a look and give me some advice,please read it carefully and do not delet it casually.Thanks!--Angell 24100128 (talk) 16:09, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Dear Angell, I have evaluated this article and have a few comments... I think the subject is notable, and it will not be deleted. A couple of comments to make it better!

I am a bit confused. Is this article different form Grand Canal (China)? What is it's relationship? Why are you wrting on the Grand Canal in this article?
Don't use words like "grand". It is better to be specific and say how many kilometers it is
Make more links. For example to Sui Dynasty
people are not familiar with Chinese history, so if you write the Dynasty, also write the time (e.g. Sui Dynasty (581-618 CE)
Don't write from your point of view. Never use "You" or "I", "be sure", but state the facts. Say which archeological thingas are there, not "you can see" etc. Also be more formal: so not "you can't help to ..." (just leave it out)
If you make a link, check it. Grand Canal for accemple goes to a disambiguation page. You need Grand Canal (China), but can write [[Grand Canal (China)|Grand Canal]], which will show as Grand Canal, but link to Grand Canal (China).
don't use mother river (it's not encylopedic), but main river or largest river
it is a valuable book... make more formal: it has several archeological sites
think of commas and points and references. So, a space after a comma or a point, and the reference always directly after it: so

This is ok, with (here) the ref. Now with a reference,^[1]
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Make sections for "introduction" etc by making a line with == at the beginning and == at the end
remove info on which is the best spot to overlook the canal (it is personal)
I don't understand "Today,with the Outfitting the boat Pavilion being the centre,it formed the Dongpo Park which combines Changzhou Ancient Canal,historical sites and new sceneries". Try to make easier sentences: Do you mean that Changzhou Ancient Canal is part of Dongpo park? And how can a canal be fully in a park?
"Outfitting the boat Pavilion" is unclear. What is it?

The summary: you write an essay on the subject and not yet an encyclopedic entry. But it is not too hard to transform it into one. If you have incorporated the changes or have further questions, just let me know here or on my talk page... Good luck! L.tak (talk) 17:49, 3 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

References

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Clarification "asored"

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