User talk:Jannel1126/sandbox

Draft feedback

Great plan!

• Make sure that your sentences are all actually telling the reader something - for example, your sentence:

"Based on genetic studies of many complex diseases, genetic heterogeneity was found to play many causative roles."

really doesn't tell us much. This could be improved by listing some of these 'causative roles,' or by listing some of the 'complex diseases' that were studied (and that are the result of genetic heterogeneity), etc. If you include info like this you could probably split this up into several sentences.

• This sentence sounds a little awkward - "Genome-wide association studies is a method commonly used to identify locis involved in heterogeneous diseases." Maybe shuffle it around a bit to say something like "Loci that are involved in heterogeneous diseases are commonly identified using methods such as genome-wide association studies.
• Loci is the plural of locus - locis is not a word :)

Good start! Vellichor (talk) 02:32, 5 November 2015 (UTC)