User talk:Deep370z/Stenosis of pulmonary artery

Peer review!

Deep, great job with your article!!! It was comprehensive and easy to read! I liked the organization especially with the background information at the beginning. I also thought it was really nice that you clarified the difference between pulmonary artery stenosis and pulmonary valve stenosis at the beginning since those can be easily confused (I have definitely confused them before). As for feedback, in the background information you talk about circulation in PAS then discuss normal circulation. I think the info is super helpful but I think for the average reader it would make more sense to read the normal first before the PAS physiology! Otherwise, I think formatting the symptoms in bulleted lists like you have the causes would make it also easier to read. Also, I really like how you went through the treatments in a chronological order. I feel like it helps put them into context and then providing the complications and adverse effects was really interesting too. Overall, you did a great job. Keep up the great work! Mannixj8 (talk) 21:29, 15 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Julianne,

Thanks for the wonderful feedback! I'm glad you found it simple to understand and easy to read without all the medical jargon that often bogs me down when reading through articles. I really like your suggestions. I think it would flow better if I discuss normal circulation FIRST then how it changes in PAS. I also agree about bullet points in the symptoms section. It current reads as just a chunky paragraph, but bullets would make it easier to see and differentiate. I'll definitely be including your changes while I continue to get ready for the final version. Thank you! Deep370z (talk) 22:23, 15 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]