Talk:Man in Tree

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Feedback

@Cyrrona: The draft in its current form is pretty good. Citations are admirably numerous! I would work on trying to rework what you have into something that reads a little more like an encyclopedia article. Currently, it reads a little more narratively than I think is normal. Check out WP:LEDE for information on how to build up the lede of the article so that it lists all the crucial facts about the event.

Maybe look at other events that have articles to see how they are structured. Perhaps there's an infobox template that you could merge over? —mako ๛ 20:55, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Anna's Comments

@Cyrrona: I think this looks great! I really don't have any major edits. I thought this was a very interesting story, and I'm glad you chose to write about it. I removed the word 'new' in the impact section because I'm not sure if Miller's mother's perspective would be considered new. I would also consider changing the word 'rekindled' in that section only because I would argue that it added to a current discussion rather than revived a dormant one. Germanna84 (talk) 03:32, 29 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]