User talk:Bshin49/sandbox

What does the article (or section) do well? This article is very easy to understand. It doesn't seem 100% complete but I was able to follow it with no problem or confusion.

What changes would you suggest overall? Cite your sources! Wikipedia makes it so easy and keeps track of everything so it's better to start now before you add even more sources to it. There was one sentence in the lede that started with "However, this term" that I think sounds a little awkward (maybe just take out "however"). I would maybe reformat the four factors you mentioned under psychological causes by making subheadings or bullets within it. I think that would help break up this long paragraph.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I would add some more discussion besides just studies and their results. I would add information on literature reviews and other analyses to show general interpretation of current research rather than just your own interpretation. You may have added literature review information but I couldn't tell because there was no citations so if you did then disregard! I'm not 100% sure if you you need detailed percentages from the study regarding football injuries. I feel like you could make a general statement about it and not go in depth. Otherwise, you're expected to be that detailed for every other sport you mention. I'm also curious as to what types of sports you plan on putting in. I think it would be interesting to see you talk about a performance sport such as gymnastics and their injuries, as I feel like they would be much different than football and soccer. Not sure if you were already planning on it, but I would add like a "Looking Ahead" section for any other information where there is only one or two studies on a particular topic.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! It definitely makes me want to change the format of my sections to be more clear. Good clarity!Jmch5160 (talk) 15:37, 28 February 2020 (UTC)jmchoi5160 (Julia)

What does the article (or section) do well? A fair amount of research has gone into your work. What changes would you suggest overall? You need to cite your sources because it seems like a lot of information. What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? get more information. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Revod123 (talk • contribs) 16:22, 28 February 2020 (UTC)