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1: Well-written

Check for WP:LEAD:

  1. Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done
  2. Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done
  3. Check for Introductory text:  Done
    • Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done
      • Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... Thus, the world is righted again." (not a concise summary of the Plot section, must be more clear and concise.)
      • Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (not a concise summary of the Production section, few important points like the music composer Tim Kiefer are not in the lead.)
      • Major Point 3: Reception ""Jake the Dog" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaim, with many critics writing that the episode was both humorous and a creative challenge." (not a concise summary of the Reception section)
    • Check for Relative emphasis:  Done
      • Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... Thus, the world is righted again." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
      • Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
      • Major Point 3: Reception ""Jake the Dog" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaim, with many critics writing that the episode was both humorous and a creative challenge." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body)
    • Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done
      • Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done
        • ""Finn the Human" is the fifth season premiere of the American animated television series Adventure Time.
      • Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done
      • Check for Proper names and titles:  Done
      • Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None
      • Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None
      • Check for Pronunciation: None
      • Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done
      • Check for Biographies: NA
      • Check for Organisms: NA
  4. Check for Biographies of living persons: NA
  5. Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done
    • Check for Non-English titles:
    • Check for Usage in first sentence:
    • Check for Separate section usage:
  6. Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done
  7. Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None
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Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done

  1. Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done
    • Check for Headings and sections:  Done
    • Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done
    • Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done
      • Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER)
      • Fix ""Finn the Human" first aired on Cartoon Network ... "Jake the Dog". the episode ... at the time of the airing." in the Reception section. There is also a 1a issue: the should be The.
  2. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done
    • Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done
    • Check for Works or publications:  Done
    • Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None
    • Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done
    • Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None
    • Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None
    • Check for Links to sister projects: None
    • Check for Navigation templates:  Done
  3. Check for Formatting:  Done
    • Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done
    • Check for Links:  Done
    • Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done
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Check for WP:WTW:  Done

  1. Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done
    • Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done
    • Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done
    • Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done
    • Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done
    • Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done
    • Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done
  2. Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done
    • Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done
    • Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done
    • Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done
    • Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None
  3. Check for Offensive material (WP:F***): None

Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done

  1. Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done
    • Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done
    • Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done
None

2: Verifiable with no original research

 Done

Check for WP:RS:  Done

  1. Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done
    • Is it contentious?: No
    • Does the ref indeed support the material?:
  2. Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done
    • Who is the author?:
    • Does the author have a Wikipedia article?:
    • What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?:
    • What else has the author published?:
    • Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?:
  3. Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done
  4. Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):
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Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done

  1. Check for Direct quotations:  Done
    • "inter-dimensional travel" ... [8] (Check on source 8, successful, "Given all the inter-dimensional travel in the episode, ...")
    • "I threw my own music from the Season 2 finale 'Mortal Folly / Mortal Recoil' on my turntables and went wild – pitching, reversing, rewinding, scratching and more – transforming Jake’s 'Lil’ Booty Dance' bongo song into a booming, merry-go-round dance celebration."[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... I threw my own music from the Season 2 finale “Mortal Folly / Mortal Recoil" on my turntables and went wild - pitching, reversing, rewinding, scratching and more - transforming Jake’s "Lil’ Booty Dance" bongo song into a booming, merry-go-round dance celebration.")
    • "a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "... and the result is a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series.")
    • "on humor and relationships" ... [3] (Check on source 3, successful, "The Dog is more focused on humor and relationships, ...")
    • "irreverent silly note[s]" ... [3] (Check on source 3, successful, " Jake says, ending the episode on an irreverent silly note after an intense story.")
    • "irreverent and narratively engaging".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... more clearly represents the progress of the medium: Irreverent and narratively engaging, ...")
    • "the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions."[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... it's the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions.")
    • "sad subtext" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... toys with an incredibly sad subtext: The world has been destroyed in something called The Great Mushroom War.")
    • "deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "Through friendship and playtime, the characters seemingly deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites.")
    • "cheery songs and vibrant artwork" were some of the series strongest points.[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "The cheery songs and vibrant artwork remain sincere while challenging the backdrop at the same time.")
    • "interesting creative challenge".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, " provided an interesting creative challenge for Ward and his team: a prolonged running time of half an hour, which basically amounted to a double episode.")
  2. Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done
  3. Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA
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  1. Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done
  2. Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done
  3. Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done


3: Broad in its coverage

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  1. Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources:
    1. Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS:
    2. Check for Out of scope:
  2. Check for The range of material that belongs in the article:
    1. Check for All material that is notable is covered:
    2. Check for All material that is referenced is covered:
    3. Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered:
    4. Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge:
    5. Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):
b. Focused:
 Done
  1. Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH):
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4: Neutral

 Done

4. Fair representation without bias:  Done

  1. Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done
  2. Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done
  3. Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done
  4. Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done
  5. Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done
  6. Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done
  7. Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done
  8. Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done
  9. Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done
  10. Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done
  11. Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done
  12. Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None
  13. Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

Images:
 Done

6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done

  1. Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done
    • Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works.
    • Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works.
  2. Check for copyright status:  Done
    • Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): Free.
    • Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): Free.
  3. Check for non-free content (WP:NFC): None
  4. Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR): NA

6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done

  1. Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done
    • Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): Relevant.
    • Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): Relevant.
  2. Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE): None
  3. Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done
    • Caption: "The episode guest starred Cloris Leachman (left) and M. Emmet Walsh (right) among others." succinct and informative

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

  • The lead does not provide an accessible overview. Major Points like the Plot and the Reception are not the concise summaries of their respective sections.
  • The lead does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.
  • Paragraphs should be long enough to develop an idea. Fix short paragraphs.


This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm delighted to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best!

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