Template:Did you know nominations/LiSA (Japanese musician, born 1987)
- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 22:16, 12 November 2011 (UTC)
LiSA
[edit]- ALT 1: ... that LiSA was one of two vocalists for a fictional band in an anime?
- Reviewed: Dude Harlino
Created/expanded by Juhachi (talk). Self nom at 21:24, 31 October 2011 (UTC)
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- Problems with hook: what is a "major singing debut"? A album release/ her first band experience (although since I know Japanese stuff, it is clear to me. But it will not be so for most of the casual first-time readers of this hook). Also "major" is subjective. Can you substitute it to make the hook sound neutral?
Problems with article: Firstly, many sentences of the "Career" section is not cited (eg:LiSA began her singing career in 2005 while still in high school when she formed the indie rock band Chucky.). Ref 1 and 3 are primary sources (see WP:PRIMARY). And from a random check, Ref 4 does not support the statement that "LiSA made her first appearance at the 2010 Animelo Summer Live on August 28.". It only shows that she appeared at this festival, but does not say that it is her "first appearance". Pending other checks until above problems are solved.--Lionratz (talk) 04:22, 1 November 2011 (UTC)
- The reviewing guide says "The article in general should use inline cited sources. A rule of thumb for DYK is a minimum of one citation per paragraph, possibly excluding the introduction, plot summaries, and paragraphs which summarize information that's cited elsewhere." The fact that some sentences don't have citations yet is not strange, as the article was just created. The article has multiple citations in the career section, certainly meeting the "one citation per paragraph" criteria. Plus, primary sources are allowed on Wikipedia as long as articles aren't based entirely on them, which this article is not. So I do not believe these issues should be taken into account when reviewing the DYK.
- As for the hook itself, I can fix that by taking out the "major debut" part. Just to be clear, the cite [1] is used to verify the hook's authenticity.--十八 05:01, 1 November 2011 (UTC)