Talk:Weezer (Green Album)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: — Legolas ^(talk2me) 15:28, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Spiderone, I will be reviewing the article for GA criteria. First I will do the qucik-fail checks. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 15:28, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Checklinks — A number of redirect links. Please correct them. And please tell me how is everything2.com, everhit.com and weezerpedia reliable sources? Please replace or remove them.
DAB links — No dab links, thats good.

Please correct the discrepancies poointed above, and in the meantime I will start with the prose review. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 15:35, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Preliminary problems solved Spiderone 16:42, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks the rreview will come up by today EOD. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 16:24, 10 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Review

First of all I wanted to say, I just love Cuomo and his songs.:)

Lead

Weezer, also known as The Green Album --> I think its best to establish here why its called green album
and only, Weezer album --> Remove the comma
debuting at number four in the US and number two in Canada --> If you are linking Billboard 200, why not link Canadian Albums Chart for Canada?
For the links for Norway and Sweden, please add their respective chart providers, so that there is a consistency.
charting on seven different charts, but it helped to transition Weezer into the early 2000s --> Rephrase, does not make any sense.

Had a stab at all these Spiderone 16:16, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Background

Following the commercial and critical failure of Pinkerton --> Add the year in braces, after Pinkerton.
During this time, Cuomo played with a different rotation of musicians in a band called Homie, which was based in Boston --> Wrong usage, "During this time, Cuomo played with a different group musicians in a band called Homie, which was based in Boston"
becoming very estranged from the band --> Remove "very"
On April 8, 1998, Matt Sharp announced --> Remove "Matt"
decline in rehearsals, and, in late fall of 1998 --> Don't use such terms like early/late fall, per WP:SEASON.
Rivers Cuomo went into a period of admitted depression --> Join with the previous sentence, as "who went into a period..."
and Mikey Welsh toured with --> How many times will you repeat the full name?
Brian Bell would occasionally visit Cuomo --> same issue
The internet was helping to boost the --> join with previous sentence
The festival served as a catalyst for Weezer's productivity, and from April to May 2000, the band rehearsed and demoed new songs in Los Angeles.[citation needed] --> Immediately replace the tag please..... not acceptable at all

Tried Spiderone 17:21, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

REcording

However, the band's record label opted to have the band employ --> However, the band's record label decided to have the band employ...
The band began rehearsing and arranging both the Summer Songs of 2000 --> what is Summer Songs of 2000 ?

Mentioned in previous section Spiderone 17:29, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The band eventually decided to hire Ric Ocasek--who --> Em-dash please
work by playing songs repetitively in order to track the bass and drums parts --> some wikilinks please in this whole section
Drummer Patrick Wilson was absent from the mixing process because he had returned --> already mentioned, you can rephrase it I guess, else remove

Had a go Spiderone 17:29, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Packaging

No issues here, good work.

Cheers Spiderone 17:30, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Release

A rearrangement is necessary. Chart performance and critical response are all part of the reception for the album, so move those two sections together. The release can be re-titled to Release and promotion as the singles actually promote the album.
album has sold 1,600,000 copies. ---> Overdue, simple would be 1.6 million copies with the non-breaking space in between 1.6 and million.

Chart performance.

Unnecessary paragraphing. Combine USA and Canada, same territories.

Singles

peaking at #2 on the US Modern Rock Charts ---> number two. Please correct this MOS throughout the section.
"Pot Song of the Year." --> quotes b4 fullstop

Critical reception

Check the alphabetization of Review scores in the side table. Rolling Stone should be after Q.
bluntly declared? Sorry but this is OR on a professional writer's comments.
from NME was --> NME is italicized

All above attempted Spiderone 18:07, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Tracklisting

Collapse the bonus tracks for a better visual feel.

Charts

Em-dash in the singles table for non-charted regions.
In the certification table you have two links Music recording sales certifications and List of music recording sales certifications. Both are redirecxts. The correct article is only List of music recording certifications. So only the Certifications title should be in the second column. Check Like a Virgin for further clarification.

References

Please replace teh normal dashes in teh reference titles to en-dashes.

Do the dates need en-dashing? Spiderone 18:19, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

No they don't, only the reference titles, where you have " - ", replace by " – ". — Legolas ^(talk2me) 05:56, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This is the final review. On hold for seven days. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 15:59, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Given it my best shot. Phew. Spiderone 18:31, 11 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I hope you are happy with the review and it helped you to better the article. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 05:56, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure what more can be done now. Does it meet criteria yet? Spiderone 08:56, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Yes it is close, just the only thing left left for you to do is check the italicization of the online sources vs. the printed media. Like in your references, Australian Recording Industry Association is not supposed to appear as italicized. Check this for all online sources. Conversely, printed media like Billboard, Rolling Stone etc is supposed to appear as italicized. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:15, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Done :) Spiderone 13:13, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Wonderful. Thanks for your prompt replies, because I have gone ahead and placed the article as GA. Congratulations! Hope one day you promote Rivers Cumo's bio to GA. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 13:59, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Will be done at some point! Spiderone 17:32, 12 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]