Talk:Wachet auf, ruft uns die Stimme, BWV 140/GA1

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Reviewer: Yash! (talk · contribs) 01:03, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Just woke up ;) Ya sh ! 01:03, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- It doesn't take long for life to go from bad to worse. My apologies for not doing this promptly. I will get to it in a couple of days. Sorry again Gerda Arendt. Ya sh ! 06:16, 3 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

There's no rush as long as we get a DYK in Advent when most people perform it, - Christmas would be too late ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:01, 3 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments below. I will not reply in detail right now, as I am first busy with the celebration of Jean Sibelius tomorrow, which will start in less than an hour with an article suddenly made a lead hook!! Improving it frantically ... - Even afterwards, there's plenty of work left on his compositions. What do you think about the question on his talk? - The ref you would like more about was in the article before me, sorry. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:29, 7 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The lead is well-written, however there is a problem of repetition. Some sentences in the lead are exactly the same as in the prose. A change in the formation of sentences either in the lead or the prose shall fix it. The repeated sentences are:
- Bach composed this cantata to complete his second annual cycle of cantatas of 1724/25, a cycle planned to be of chorale cantatas.
- ...appears unchanged in movements 1, 4 and 7, while an unknown author supplied poetry for movements 2 and 3, 5 and 6, both a sequence of recitative and duet.
The quote by William G. Whittaker is also repeated. In the lead, either a few words from the main quote can be used or you can try to write the quote in your own words or a mixture of both. In the prose, you can expand the quote and keep the same in the lead.
2 oboes -> two oboes
2 violins -> two violins

I reworded the first two repetitions, but would like to leave the quote, because it can't be said better. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:13, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

History and text

It won't be overlinking if we use "Johann Sebastian Bach" instead of "Bach" in the first sentence.

done (even if it's probably the only one of the cantatas) --GA

Use something other than "extremely early". It is a bit vague term. If early, show it numerically or in some other way.

Can you word it better? We don't have to go to calendar and moon phases in this context, or do we? If Easter is early, we may still have only 25 or 26 Sundays after Trinity. Only if it is very/extremely early we have 27. The article Easter has "Details of this complicated computation are found below in the section Date." --GA

How would just "early" be? "earlier than most..."? "Extremely" doesn't sound right. Ya sh ! 05:32, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I think I just explained why I think it would not do (because just "early" might still be only 25 or 26, not 27, it happened only twice during Bach's time of cantata performances) but do it for you. Ideas from someone watching with better English welcome! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:39, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Can we link Ordinary Time?

I dropped the lessons from a different Lutheran system altogether. Was there before, is unreferenced, and not really needed. --GA

It is "text and tune" in the lead and "text" in the prose.

fixed --GA

The prose reads that the "text was already available". Previously, it is said that an "unknown author supplied poetry for movements 2 and 3, 5 and 6" and that "text of the three stanzas appears unchanged in movements 1, 4 and 7" - So, who wrote the text for 1, 4 and 7? Or am I missing something?

you are missing the original hymn text by Nicolai for 1 4 7, - text was already available only says something about when it was written: already in 1724 when Bach worked on the second cantata cycle, only that there was no 27th Sunday that year --GA

Okay. Ya sh ! 05:32, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thus, the hymn and the cantata are commonly performed in churches on that Sunday. The text and its eschatological themes are also commonly associated with the early Sundays of the season of Advent, and so the cantata is commonly performed during that season. - perhaps a ref?

Another line that was there before I ever looked at the article, sigh. Just today the central chorale was played ina service I attended. The hymn is among the songs for Advent in hymnals. The Sunday for which it was composed so rarely ... --GA

, and so the... -> , so the...

reworded --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:09, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Scoring and structure

Can be merged as a single sentence:
- Bach structured the cantata in seven movements.
- The duration is given as 31 minutes.

Sorry, I don't get it, --GA

Bach structured the cantata in seven movements in the duration of 31 minutes. - something like that? Ya sh ! 05:32, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It is "basso continuo including bassoon" in the lead and "basso continuo" in the prose. Can something about bassoon be included?

yes, done --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:12, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

no because the sentence after structure relates to the structure --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:42, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Music

Better to avoid little sentences such as: It is in E-flat major.[10] The cantus firmus is sung by the soprano.

dropped the first completely, the keys are in the table, --GA

Shouldn't the German translation be in italics? For example:
- The first movement, "Wachet auf, ruft uns die Stimme" -> The first movement, Wachet auf, ruft uns die Stimme

tricky: it's the German original, used as the title of a movement (italic) in the table, but in the prose as text to understand the action, therefore I would leave it as quote (as in many comparable works such as BWV 22) --GA

Fair enough. Ya sh ! 05:32, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

From this a rising syncopated..." - We are missing two little vertical dashes ;)

sorry, don't get it --GA

Sorry for my horrible humor: From this a rising syncopated..." -> "From this a rising syncopated..." - we could use a double inverted comma in the start. Ya sh ! 05:32, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Er kommt"... -> The second movement, "Er kommt"... - not really necessary and you can pass on it. Just suggested it to increase the length of the tiny sentence ;)

I pass, because it's kind of an alarming shouting, - keep the drama --GA

I may be wrong, but shouldn't the full stop be inside the quotes in these?
- "contemporary operatic love-duets in his use of chains of suspensions and parallel thirds and sixths".
- "artistic intensity".
- "heavenly Jerusalem".
- "a cantata without weakness, without a dull bar, technically, emotionally and spiritually of the highest order".

none of them is a full sentence --GA

In the lead, it is "love-duets" and "love duet" in the prose. Not really a big issue but consistency is always better.

found "duets" in both,but corrected "is" to "are" to match it --GA

"most beautiful, most mature and, at the same time, most popular sacred cantatas. - um...

hard to find a source for Wikipedia's favourite phrase "most popular" ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:32, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Again, sorry... It is missing a double inverted comma like above. Ya sh ! 05:32, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Media

No need to mention "Cantata 140" every time. If you want to use it, write a sentence with "Cantata 140".
Use "first", "second",..., instead of "1st", "2nd",....

sigh, that's a section I didn't touch at all ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:34, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

References

Are there any more details available for ref #8 other than "Lutheran Service Book, xv."?

no, but dropped anyway --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:41, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That should do it :) Ya sh ! 11:11, 7 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for good questions! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:41, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work Gerda! Passing it. Ya sh ! 17:19, 10 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]