Talk:Tropical Storm Kelly/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 16:31, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hello User:Yellow Evan, I will be reviewing this article for you. As always, I will pass this article if most issues are addressed and/or resolved within 7 days.--12george1 (talk) 16:31, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review GC. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Tropical Storm Kelly was a weak but destructive tropical storm that struck the Philippines in June 1981." - Wikilink "tropical storm" to tropical cyclone and "struck" to Landfall (meteorology)
- A strike technically is not a landfall. It is when a portion of the TS force winds occur over land. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Just wikilink it as early as possible then.--12george1 (talk) 21:22, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"and made landfall on northern Vietnam on July 4 as a tropical storm." --> "and made landfall in northern Vietnam on July 4 as a tropical storm."
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"near a volcano sustained flooding." - You should name the volcano and be more specific about where it is, because there are many volcanoes in Philippines
- {[Done}}. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"At least 800 homes were destroyed while 3,845 ha (9,500 acres) of rice field were destroyed." - Don't use "destroyed" twice in the same sentence. I suggest this: "At least 800 homes were destroyed while 3,845 ha (9,500 acres) of rice fields were ruined. "
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"However, 16 hours later, the TCFA was cancelled." - 16 hours after what? You haven't mentioned a date in four sentences.
- Added. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
" Late on July 4, Kelly made landfall as a tropical storm[7] 185 km (115 mi) south of Hanoi in Vietnam" - What was Kelly's wind speed at landfall?
- Noted. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Nine towns in an 4,300 mi (6,920 km) area were flooded." - Kilometers need to go before miles
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Reference #15 is a deadlink
- Blame the Miami Heat :P Fixed btw. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:17, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Great job, Yellow Evan! I will now pass this article and list it as a Good Article. Congratulations and keep up the good work!--12george1 (talk) 21:26, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]