Talk:Tom Peterson/GA1

GA Review

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Well-written

Tom Peterson's section. Founding and expansion subsection.
- For all $ in this section and future sections, please use US$ and pipe this in. The first $ is shown at the lead sentence of this subsection.
Tom Peterson's section. Bankruptcy and reorganization subsection.
- Washington Square Too mentioned in the third sentence of the lead paragraph. Is that a misspelling? I ask this because I have never been to Oregon and am uncertain if that is an actual location.
- In the second paragaph's lead sentence, add "bankruptcy" after Chapter 11. Capitalize "Chapter" in same sentence.
- For the third paragraph, add "year" between fiscal and 1991 and also add what time period constitutes a fiscal year for Peterson's (July 1-June 30, October 1-September 30 as examples.).
- In the last sentence, put in parentheses after nationals (Such as Best Buy and then-Circuit City) to familiarize readers with other electronics stores.
Tom Peterson's section. Tom Peterson & Gloria's Too! subsection.
- Use {{Convert}} on the 11,000 ft2 showroom
In popular culture section. Celebrity appearances subsection.
- In the first paragraph, is KKRZ and AM or FM radio station? Specify.
- Italicze Where's the Art in the second paragraph.

Factually accurate and verifiable

WP:AGF assumed for all offline articles. If possible, find the references you mentioned online to help for better searching if plans are there to take this to WP:FA.
Use WP:CITET for all article. All articles but one have no mentioned of when they were accessed. This needs to be done.

Broad

No issues.

Neutral

No issues.

Stable

Last edit was a bot edit done on the morning of 17 June 2010. Prior to that, the last edit was done on 25 May 2010. No issues.

Illustrated

No issues.

Overall

Hold. A little work on this and a GA can be obtained.

Reviewer: Chris (talk) 14:10, 17 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Update and comment

Chris, thanks for taking the time to look this over. I've gone through each of your items on the list and updated the page accordingly where I could, and in a few cases I have explanations or questions. In order:

US$ -- I've added US$ to the first dollar figure near the top of the story, although your request seems to indicate you would like the full symbol and piped link added to all dollar signs within the article? I haven't seen that myself on any FA or GA articles I recall, and WP:$ only seems to call for the full symbol on first usage; in any case, the context of U.S. dollars should be fairly clear. Please let me know if I have misunderstood.

Washington Square Too -- Yep, that's the "clever" name for the Washington Square annex. This can be verified with the Oregonian[1], a website for Starbucks fans[2], and though it is uncited, the Washington Square (Oregon) article has this information, too.

Chapter 11 -- Done.

Fiscal 1991 -- I have changed the wording a bit more -- it now refers to "the company's 1991 fiscal year". However, I can't say what calendar the Tom Peterson's fiscal year followed; this information was not in the Oregonian article I cited, and the company ceased operations more than a year ago. Including this information would necessarily involve WP:OR.

Parentheses after nationals -- The 1995 Oregonian article, which is not online, describes the following as the relevant nationals: "Circuit City, Computer City and the Good Guys"; although I can't be sure, I don't think Best Buy had arrived yet. In any case, the sentence you are asking me to put parentheses into is actually a Peterson quote, so I wouldn't want to break the flow. Is it important enough information to include in a sentence following?

{{Convert}} -- Done.

KKRZ-FM -- Done.

Where's the Art? -- Done.

Online sourcing -- A substantial number of these articles are from The Oregonian, owned by Newhouse (which does not like to put its content online any more than it has to) so any readily available online versions would be WP:COPYVIO. I'd love to take this to FA eventually, so I recognize this may be an issue then.

Accessdate -- I have now re-accessed these articles using the Nexis database, and added this.

Please let me know what you think when you find a moment. Cheers, WWB (talk) 15:50, 20 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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