Talk:The Post-American World/GA1

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This was in the literature section but I feel that it belongs in politics. I will readjust later. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Criterion 1: well-written

Lead: 1. Comma needed - "In the book Zakaria argues that". Place a comma after "book". When you begin a sentence with a directional note (reference to time, place, position, etc.) then place a comma after it. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]; 2. Comma use - "other countries such as China and India, are becoming global players in many fields." Either remove the comma after "India" or place a comma after "countries". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]; 3. Clarification - "The book was said" said by whom? Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Background: 1. Comma use - "of Foreign Affairs magazine, before accepting" The comma in front of "before" is inappropriate. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]; 2. Comma needed - "During this time Zakaria's political" See note for Lead 1. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]; 3. Comma use - "pro-market stances, and to the point" Either remove the comma or add "shifted" after "and". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]; 4. Comma use - "In subsequent years he watched" and "Over the next few years Zakaria developed" See note for Lead 1. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Synopsis: 1. Comma use - "thesis of the book, that a" replace the comma with a long dash or a colon, preferably the colon. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]; 2. Comma use - "emerging challenges, and that there" - remove the comma or place "believes" after "and". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]; 3. Comma needed - "At the same time Zakaria sees" See note for Lead 1. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Style and comparisons: 1. It would be nice to mention the names of critics that are quoted in the first paragraph, but it is not completely necessary. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

General: 1. Just make sure to watch tenses and don't let it switch around on you. I didn't see anything major in this area, but there are little things - in Reception paragraph two, it has past tense along with "Hari points". Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Criterion 2: factually accurate and verifiable

Most of the sources are offline and unaccessible, so I must AGF on them. Nothing stood out that seemed questionable, and there was heavy use of quotes. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Criterion 3: broad in its coverage

From what I can tell, nothing appears to be missing. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Criterion 4: neutral

No challenges of neutrality and I don't know enough to warrant to say that it is non-neutral. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Criterion 5: stable

Appears to be stable from what I can tell. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Criterion 6: illustrated, if possible, by images

Image of the book cover and two text boxes provide multiple illustrations. Ottava Rima (talk) 14:12, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I have made the suggested changes here. maclean 19:21, 16 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]