Talk:The Great Artiste/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 03:50, 19 March 2013 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:50, 19 March 2013 (UTC)

• Two DABs to fix
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:20, 20 March 2013 (UTC)
• External links are good.
• Photos appropriately licensed.
• What happened to the aircraft after the war? Did it remain Silverplate equipped and with the 509th, etc.
  • Tried to make it clearer in the last paragraph that it remained with the 509th at Roswell.
• And what about before going to Tinian, did it drop more pumpkins and various shapes?
  • No, the aircraft that were used for the training in the US were replaced by brand new B-29s before the 509th departed for Tinian in 1945.

Great Artiste was one of these.

• • • OK, then say that.
• If significant, use this info to plump out the lede a little.
  • Expanded the lead a little. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:20, 20 March 2013 (UTC)

--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:05, 20 March 2013 (UTC)

• Combine these two sentences: It participated in the bombing of Hiroshima and Nagasaki. It was the only aircraft to participate in both missions. on the lines of "It was the only aircraft to participate in both the bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki, albeit as an observation aircraft on each mission" or somesuch. I think it's important to let people upfront that it wasn't one of the actual delivery aircraft and that there were other aircraft along on each mission.
  • done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:46, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
• Missing space: Bombardment Group,in September.
  • done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:46, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
• And don't capitalize pumpkin bomb.
  • done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:46, 21 March 2013 (UTC)

--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:36, 20 March 2013 (UTC)