Talk:The ArchAndroid/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:16, 14 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well, well, aren't you a lucky son of a gun? Long wait huh? — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:16, 14 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Haha yes it's been a while, thought about removing it for a while. Think I nominated it a bit hastily but a review would be helpful to develop the article and if it does not pass at this stage a renomination would be most likely. Thanks in advance, --FeuDeJoie (talk) 19:50, 15 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

2008–2010 --> 2008–10 per MOS:DATERANGE
If its in the soul genre, you don't need to include neo soul, as the main soul covers it.
Add alternate text for the cover image per WP:ALT, to help in readers who are visually impaired.
Since this is a concept album and is part of a series, a chronology is needed in this case, irrespective of the first release being an EP.

Lead

My main concern is that the lead is not according to WP:LEAD, meaning that although it summarizes the article, it nevertheless writes a pretty small synopsis. Seeing the article body length, I would expect it to be at least three paras.
released May 18, 2010, on Wondaland Arts --> released May 18, 2010, by Wondaland Arts
You need to somehow introduce the fact that the album is a concept album and then say "It consists of the second and third parts to Monáe's Metropolis concept series".
There is no mention of the release and promotion parts.
number 17 --> number 17, non-breaking space is needed always between a numeral and an alphabet.
Total sales of the album in US are courtesy Nielsen SoundScan, so you need to mention that.

Background

The ArchAndroid is the follow-up to Janelle Monáe's debut EP Metropolis: Suite I (The Chase) (2007) --> The ArchAndroid is the follow-up to Janelle Monáe's debut EP, Metropolis: Suite I (The Chase) (2007), and....
she was inspired by the quote --> to do what?
discussed her incorporation of the android as a metaphor for a minority and the role of the story's protagonist in an interview for Blues & Soul, stating --> Grammatical error
Monáe has said about the recording sessions --> Make it a new para
the ArchAndroid I went through a very --> The ArchAndroid, I went through a very
Why is the studio name in italics?
link Turkey, Prague and Atlanta, not common place names

Music

You are talking about the musical style and its content, so this section name can easily be named Composition
all the things I love - scores for films like --> En-dash instead of a normal dash
Monáe has stated that the album's lyrical themes and storyline were heavily influenced by Fritz Lang's Metropolis. --> needs source
Can yuo avoid repetition of the phrase "The track" in this whole section?

Release

In promotion of the album --> For promoting the album,
link youtube
Monae performed to her network debut --> I don't follow
Again, continuous repetition of Monae
sp mistake --> wwas
In singles, when you say that a video was released, please be more explanatory, what did the video show, reception etc.

Reception

The whole chart performance section doesnot flow well, and is a week-by-week analysis with no conjencture. Please rephrase the whole section.
Credit the total US sales to Nielsen SoundScan.

Charts

No need to mention Billboard with thje US R&B chart, and have it in its full-name, Top R&B/Hip-Hop Albums.

Needs work. Seven days on hold. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:23, 25 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

A little bit of work's been done, but not much. Should it be failed? Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:42, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Actually the nominator has informed me that he's taking an exam and will be back after a week to fully address the comments. Hence I'm waiting to see if he does that. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:52, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks fine by me. I'm happy to pass this as GA. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 14:23, 12 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]